Sidewalks and Sliding Doors



She’s got an appetite
for déjà vu, a whole slew
of mending limbs, a sig
-nature IQ curled be
-tween two live
-wire insected eyebrows.

Her pen
-chant for the seventies
tends to alternate between
love and hate, malaria and
malarkey, partly be

’cause she’s bent
but not broken, frozen
between standing
and kneeling.

He calls her So
-phia, but
her fever is healing,
so she’s about to go ex
-tinct.

 

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Cool list from Shawna.

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3 Responses to Sidewalks and Sliding Doors

  1. Shawna says:

    Oh dude, I am seriously having a literal LOL fit over here. That was awesome! TOO much fun, for sure. :)

    Your opening line is killer: “She’s got an appetite for déjà vu.” I absolutely love all your sound and clever line breaks throughout. You picked just the right words to go with those on the list. “Malarkay” was a fantastic choice. Super title. (Reminded me of one of my favorite movies.) I saw “curled between two lives” at first,” which was cool. Definitely fits with the movie I’m thinking of. “Insected eyebrows.” Awesome and yuck. :) Also made me think of “inverted,” like she’s scowling or skeptical. And “intersected,” which sounds like a mess!

    “Her pen
    -chant for the seventies” … Yay over this line break and added meaning.

    “tends to alternate between
    love and hate, malaria and
    malarkey, partly be” … Perfect.

    “she’s bent
    but not broken, frozen
    between standing
    and kneeling” … Perfect.

    Cracking up over “He calls her Sophia Butt.” ;) All your line breaks make it clear that she’s fed up. The butterflies have flown away and she’s totally getting over this guy and is ready to be done with all he’s put her through. Ex-tinct, indeed.

    So great. Can’t wait to read the next one!

  2. First, I love Shawna’s interpretation. I missed a lot of that on the first reading, and was just enraptured by the music of the language, divorced, as it were, from the meaning. Awesome work as usual, de.

  3. I like “He calls her So” – as in, never taking anything she says or feels seriously. And the opening “deja vu” – as in she just keeps getting into the same dramatic situations with this “He” over and over again. “mending limbs” — helping him out in so many ways. I took the IQ to be a comment about perhaps his lack thereof. “wire insected” – very interesting image.
    Extinct – kind of like those seventies. And sidewalks. And sliding doors!
    Hopefully she’ll be reborn at some point.

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