unsatisfied customer

Posted on February 14, 2012 by whimsygizmo

heart ransacked
vision blurred
soul traded for charms
sold from scurvy belt
she
…….steps
……………steeps
…………………….seeps
…………………………….into the weeping fog.

 

 

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8 Responses to unsatisfied customer

  1. whimsygizmo says:
    February 14, 2012 at 8:53 am

    Written for the Sunday Whirl Wordle (not all of the words wanted to be wrangled in there today, but a couple of them inspired the whole thing)…
    http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/2012/02/12/wordle-43/

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  2. Buddah Moskowitz says:
    February 14, 2012 at 9:37 am

    I liked the action in this, esp in the closing rhyming. Well-written, indeed.

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  3. Pamela Smyk Cleary says:
    February 14, 2012 at 9:41 am

    … and the
    flight
    of steps
    — very nice! 😉

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  4. Hannah Gosselin says:
    February 14, 2012 at 10:59 am

    Love your words and use of formatting to create just the feeling, De! Awesome as always! 🙂

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  5. pmwanken says:
    February 14, 2012 at 4:10 pm

    Lovely piece of writing De! And…I love seeing you at The Whirl!! 🙂

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  7. brenda w says:
    February 15, 2012 at 5:38 pm

    Sad, but soft on the ear. I love the sounds in this piece, and the wordlplay.

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