(after Adrienne Rich)
I know you are reading this poem
bleary-eyed from trying to write your
own, lost and tossed on your torrid
phrases, afraid the shore will never
show.
I know you are reading this poem
through saltwater of your own making,
and with a heart clenched tight as a fist in your
chest, and with grief on your breath like a
mourning song.
I know you are squinting and looking for
a word, a phrase you might tether yourself
to, some hope balloon you might fly to
places unknown, anywhere but here.
I know you are reading this poem
trying to figure out why the words are
marching in thisparticularorder and why
all sense and sensibility have gone AWOL and
why this battlefield is still strewn with verb,
noun, participle.
I know you are reading this poem
out loud through a mouthful of rice crispies
each syllable punctuated by snap,
crackle, pop.
I know you are reading this poem
with half your brain
because the other half is busy living
in the three-dimensional world.
I know you are reading this poem
in a thousand ways
because I have read thousands
the same
by candlelight and flashlight under sheets
and fluorescent bulb and lamps on rainy streets
and eyelash flutter
after dark.
I know,
and I am changed, saved
by the fact that
I know you are reading this poem.
Do yourself a favor and click below to read Adrienne Rich’s original. Amazing.
Wonderful prompt by Poetry Mix Tape.
http://djvorreyer.wordpress.com/2012/03/31/poetry-mixtape-14-dedications/
Love your third stanza especially!
“I know,
and I am changed, saved
by the fact that
I know you are reading this poem.”
I know, right?!
Also shared for Open Link Monday over at Toads:
http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2012/04/open-link-monday.html
How sweet, De! I especially like-
I know you are squinting and looking for
a word, a phrase you might tether yourself
to, some hope balloon you might fly to
places unknown, anywhere but here.
Oh wow. I loved and relished every word and line of your poem, then went over and read Adrienne Rich’s, also wonderful. Loved them both but yours, actually, even better than hers. I especially love the hope balloon!!!! Wonderful to read on a rainy Monday. Just glorious.
How did you know about the Rice Krispies?
I adored every line of this for any number of reasons. Just three… The pacing is comfortable, the imagery and inferences are unusual and the last stanza speaks volumes about so many of us. Brilliant! I, too, had AR on my mind…
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/04/02/wild-white-rose/
ooooohhhhhh this is so wonderful wheedling and insinuating itself in my heart. i miss her, too. this is a true and beautiful tribute, thank you so, so much.
Reblogged this on kyotzeta and commented:
For poets and readers everywhere…I love this so much. 🙂
Reblogged this…it’s my first reblog so I hope I did it right. I just had to make sure as many poets (and readers) saw it as I could. 🙂
Also shared at dVerse Open Link Night:
http://dversepoets.com/2012/04/03/open-link-night-week-38/
haha…yes sometimes it makes me happy to know you are reading…and i am glad i am not near the rice crispies flying out your mouth …lol…nicely done…
“I know,
and I am changed, saved
by the fact that
I know you are reading this poem.”
And I would read this poem a thousand times a day extra to save a poetess like you!!!!
Love this whole thing, but especially, ‘eyelash flutter in the dark.”
oops–should be ‘after dark.’ So many poems tonight, please forgive the misquote–this says a lot of what I’m feeling right now.
Wonderful! Especially love that last stanza 🙂 Knowing someone is out there reading and appreciating our poems really does change us…I know it has truly changed me. Thanks for sharing this, De.
nice…esp. love that part…
I know you are reading this poem
with half your brain
because the other half is busy living
in the three-dimensional world.
I know you are reading this poem
in a thousand ways…. because i also think it’s so cool to read poems with the direct connection to the real world while living totally in the moment and yet drink from another’s thoughts…i like..
Pretty much love it 🙂
So funny, I purposely crafted first and my first line resembles your second, bleary-eyed and mine tired-eyed! Ha!
and with a heart clenched tight as a fist in your
chest, and with grief on your breath like a
mourning song.
I SO LOVE THESE!! I so adore your last stanza!! Your Adrienne Rich poem is so astounding….period. Great write, De! :)’s to you!
and flashlight under sheets
What a fun poem this is. And I was such a ready when I was young (still am) I went through a ton of flashlight batteries.
Was this written in response to a challenge? I thought I read another poem similar to this…
Yes, Margaret. Here’s the link to the original challenge:
http://djvorreyer.wordpress.com/2012/03/31/poetry-mixtape-14-dedications/
Adrienne Rich passed away recently, so it’s highly possible you’ve seen her poem elsewhere, or similar dedications to it. If you’re not familiar with Poetry Mixtape, she has some great weekly prompts. 🙂