Don’t mind us.
We’re just sitting here listening
to the sound of broken
and the murmur
-ation of star
Mama Zen over at Toads bids us to write a “Twitter poem” (140 characters or less.) Come play!
Not a word or character wasted.
A tweet I’d read and reread. Really well done.
🙂 I read this as a commentary of twitter, though I realize you probably did not intend it this way at all – just my bias creeping in 🙂 “the sound of broken” – which you see a lot of on twitter. “ation of star /lings” I took to be about how everyone is trying to be a star, seeking that adulation and attention. And then of course the “don’t mind us” — perfect for my interpretation — the audience, not wanting to be acknowledged, or pretending so, anyway.
Sorry for my cynicism! Perhaps it is just a “tweet nothing” that I’ve misread!
I read a story in the grocery store today…it was a book in the local authors section and it was about a hummingbird who had become entrapped in a stifling hot garage and its wings had been immobilized by spiderwebs…the main character saved him with sugar water and removed the web with tiny scissors…she’d been grieving the passing of a loved one…long story short when she went to the memorial there on each seat was a sheet with a photograph of a hummingbird sipping nectar…she stated in her notes that a group of hummingbirds is called a murmuration and that hummingbirds actually use spider webs to secure their nests to the tree. I never read books in the store but for some reason that one caught my eye and I picked it up without even thinking about it…and it wasn’t even hip level…I had to bend over for it! Lol
And all this to say that I’d never heard that term, murmuration before today at least not consciously noticed it and to hear it again in your beautiful and deep tweet poem tonight feels significant.
I knew this challenge would be right up your alley…you work magic with brevity…as was said…each word matters, not one wasted.
Sorry for my Loooonnnngggg comment. 😉
What a beautiful, beautiful story, Hannah. Thank you so much for sharing it. Hummingbirds are my favorite. I always feel a certain connection to them.
I had not heard that “murmuration” was a flock of starlings until a week or so ago. Read it on one of the poetry sites, I believe. Can’t remember where, but fell in love with the phrase immediately. Anything that contains “murmur of stars” in the middle is a-ok with me. 😉
How cool…we’re on like parallel poetic paths it feels like, to me…I just love the coincidences…it’s confirming.
Hummingbirds are so amazing…my grandmother loves them and this summer I had a really special close encounter with one on the shore of the cove where I grew up for eleven years. It had that aha feeling…almost as if I’d dreamed it before.
I love, love the way you see words, De…Murmur of stars indeed.
Look at this cool letter/word play that was revealed to me tonight at a Power of Love meeting…Creative/Reactive…interesting what the switch of one letter can do…
I ♥ Words
We need stickers and T-shirts and pens…turquoise ones with a motto like this…
That and “Murmur of Stars” and other fancy word fun… 🙂
Hi De, than you for reminding me of the murmuration of starlings. I had forgotten. It was on a poetry site though that I first heard of it. The broken wings, I do not like to hear about that. There is a pleasant memory though, of broken wings at a wild life sanctuary we visited in Alaska. Every animal kept there would not be able to survive in the wild. There were some beautiful creatures.
Is this something that you yourself would tweet or something that your poet dreamed up? For sure it is one that keeps one accounted for. A 90-something writer in the Houston Chronicle never wanted to be kept track of but now at his age he appreciates it. I might too at his age, as I get lost easily now.
I don’t tweet but I might start. Although I am not Catholic at this time my only ‘friend’ would be the Pope. I understand that he has some beautiful and inspiring tweets. I limit my Facebook friends to people who I at least know. There must be in the 20’s of people with friend requests that I have no idea who they might be. Only one that I know of is hustling guys to her site.
BTW, I left a note on my post since you came. It said in part: “I am not 84 years old yet. I did beat 64 though,. My poet obviously writes about one who is 84 …”
I love murmurations – wrote a pen a few months back on them, and included a video – here it is, if you want to take a look murmuration ~
This is incredibly clever ….
I prefer the old-fashioned tweeters’ flight paths myself.
I just love the way you break words!
Love that “star-lings” enjamb on! 🙂
Nice, I love it!
nice to hear murmuring of stars
This tweet goes perfectly with your heading of your cute little toes!
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