Do you see her much? (Oh, Luna)

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She dances up most nights,
…………………….sometimes a slender curl,
others fat and sassy.

Have you felt her touch,
her borrowed light on your
……………………….hungry skin?

She’s got a darker side.
………………I haven’t been, but I
imagine it’s a fine place
………………………………..to hide.

 

 

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This one won a Top Row Seven spot! πŸ™‚

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25 Responses to Do you see her much? (Oh, Luna)

  1. shailajav says:

    I like the rhythm in this piece as well as the staggered lines. You seem to have made her dance through the words. Beautiful!

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  2. Misky says:

    Wonderfully imaginative!

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  3. habibadanyal says:

    That was a dancing poetry alright.

  4. S(t)ri says:

    Wow.. I wish I could dance for this poem!

    ~S(t)ri
    Smile, it makes (y)our day!

  5. Kir Piccini says:

    The moon never sounded so sensual.. The descriptions were so lovely.

  6. AZ Gringa says:

    Heavenly… πŸ™‚

  7. “Fat and sassy” – I wouldn’t mind being described that way.

  8. jannatwrites says:

    Beautiful! I like the last stanza about the dark side of the moon.

  9. I love this!! Beautiful

  10. Mike says:

    A great take on the prompt.
    Loved the way you set it out.

  11. gennaclaire says:

    Love the “borrowed light.” Great clues throughout and wonderful rhythm.

  12. “your hungry skin” was my favorite part. Once again, very clever!

  13. Marcy says:

    Very creative! You packed such great details about the moon in such a short piece.

  14. Love this! “her borrowed light on your ….hungry skin” — perfect! Her darker side would indeed be a great place to hide! πŸ™‚

  15. This is so gorgeous, from the format to the word choices. I am in love with the moon. I always have been, and next it is full? I will think of it as “fat and sassy”. Love this!

  16. Christine says:

    Gorgeous! Especially in the wake of last night’s eclipse. πŸ™‚ Thanks so much for sharing!

  17. atrm61 says:

    Beautiful imagery:-)Loved it!

  18. Nice character sketch… Lovely write. πŸ™‚

  19. tinsenpup says:

    This is perfect; so lovely.

  20. theinnerzone says:

    This is just gorgeous, De! Love, love, love it!

  21. himigmeansmelody says:

    Brings about a beautiful picture (: very nice πŸ˜€

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