She is borrowed water
and bones twice stolen,
sharp sink and sway.

She is rocking open,
a limbed bridge broken,
all mess and ache.



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10 Responses to Suspension

  1. jae rose says:

    Wow..this is a bone whittled to poetic perfection..the suspense big and heavy in between the bony lines

  2. Been there before… ouch. Strong work, De! Happy Easter to thee.

  3. Another one well drawn – I can feel the ache in this one.

  4. Andy Sewina says:

    Very to the point, and this works so well to. You could of course make it even shorter by getting rid of ‘she is’ twice, and a couple of ‘ands’. Good work.

  5. Yes, I can feel your ache!

  6. Pamela says:

    To the point, wonderfully concise poem, De.


  7. You’ve packed a lot into this! Nicely done!

  8. oldegg says:

    “All mess and ache” and still we go back for more. A crisp piece of writing.

  9. seingraham says:

    This is marvellous De…so succinct (as you may know, I envy the less wordy ones) – I feel special because we both used “bones twice stolen” (I know, I need to get a life” LOL) As always, your work rocks.Oh, I see my bones were “twice stolen” – not the same thing at all. Sigh.

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