A circle of fine cardboard and a chance to see a tassel.

No hassle, hash or mashed tag, small
bag packed, the grades you ate graduate
an A+, plus a red rude
-imentary box. Put on your sox, a pox
upon your off kilter off to kill her
kill her off smile. (Simile?)

We are tender with buttons
and lace, a trace, a change includes
potatoes,
no useless windows, used less, win
-does, unless of course your coarse shoes,
these shallow holes,

wholly shallow.

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Prompted by Toads.
(With title and permission slip for these slips of tongue, from Gertrude Stein.)

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19 Responses to A circle of fine cardboard and a chance to see a tassel.

  1. whimsygizmo says:

    Ha. I played all Stein-y like once before, also.
    See it here, if you dare:
    https://whimsygizmo.wordpress.com/2013/08/27/still-life-2/

  2. Marian says:

    Holy shadow! Holy. 🙂

  3. Gillena Cox says:

    luv this from beginning to “wholly shallow.” end

    thanks for dropping in to read mine De

    much love…

  4. Sherry Marr says:

    This is brilliant! You have channeled Stein. Like a fine wine (whine?) LOL.

  5. Kerry O'Connor says:

    This is a fine tribute to Stein’s style, without losing the Whimsy way with word play.

  6. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    Lovely wordplay!

  7. Isadora Gruye says:

    squeee! So fun, De. You really channeled Stein in your pacing and word play – hashed or mashed. You know, while contemplating on if I should post a Stein challenge, I wonder how tender buttons would read if Stein had written it today….pieces like SMART PHONE or KEYLESS ENTRY…..well done and viva la

  8. Oh my, you captured channeled Gertrude Stein with this piece! Love it!

  9. This was perfect for you – you word magician you!! Love your offering, De and all the dynamic dissections and rearrangements! So fun!

  10. Helen says:

    You get an A+ from me!!

  11. De, this was so much fun, this prompt. I KNEW you’d ace it! From the first mention of “tender buttons” to the alliteration and wordplay (smile and simile, and yet, who can read the word “simile” without smiling, right?!), brilliant. Just brill. There is enough De in here, I must add, that it is more than just Stein. It is SteinJackson, without losing any of her flavor. The best of two! Amy

  12. Shawna says:

    The title makes me picture a homeless teenager, graduating from high school despite all the challenges he’s faced. But I love that it’s a circle of cardboard rather than a square. It makes me think of a womb. A hiding place. An enclosure.

    Okay, scratch that. Now I think this is written by a fetus (slightly brain damaged). The her is the mother. She’s still in high school. Is she going to stay in school or drop out? There’s a chance they may have a future, but it’s going to be an uphill climb. (This is definitely coming from a book I’ve been reading.)

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