Erasing Stars

Screenshot 2015-04-21 10.28.50
Lumbering out of the water at night
by daybreak, they return
widely speculated, but
two worlds
–fed on
flow of

Changes in rainfall
concentrate in pools;
the importance of

intimately linked to the fate
and functioning


An erasure poem for NaPoWriMo, day 21.
Source text: “Hippos: The life force of African rivers.” Science Daily, April 14, 2016.

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5 Responses to Erasing Stars

  1. Vince Gotera says:

    Wow … great erasure.

    Hey, too, congrats on the shout out from Maureen at today. You deserve it, De.

  2. I love hippos!
    And because is SO important to everything, I must agree!

  3. Mia says:

    I love that when you offer the visual erasure, the eyes can put different words together, out of your intended order. Like this: “they return, speculated, widely two worlds.” And “found flow of fed-on river.” Also, “changes of rainfall pools the importance of is.” Then there’s “functioning of and, intimately linked to the fate-stars.”

  4. Mia says:

    Ear-racing stars. šŸ˜›

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