cake

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prompted by dVerse.

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18 Responses to cake

  1. claudia says:

    dang it – i want a piece of that cake
    ha
    love your play on spring and frost/ing…

  2. The cake is a perfect image.. just layered perfectly.. Love that me (er)asure.. what an excellent wordplay.

  3. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Fantastic fun while rocking the prompt; cake was a fine choice–wonder if someone will chose a casserole? like the lines /bake it in sin/tax & tin/.

  4. Opal Onyx says:

    Dude! This is awesome! It sounds no naughty, and I don’t even know what it means. My favorite combination. 🙂

    Cake = see/sea ache

    Have I read this before? Major deja vu.

    I love what you did with “measure,” squeezing out “me,” “erasure,” and “azure.” Also “a sure me” and “assure me.”

    You’re a sneaky little thing, hiding “take me back” over there in the right margin. Brilliant code, girl!

    “ward center” Makes me picture you feeling like a child inside. Also, your mermaid is flipping around throughout this poem.

    I love you, my little fashion nugget. 😉

  5. X says:

    I love the hidden ‘equal measure’ and me – erasure – there is a whole poem in that. The tintinnabulation – I had to look that up which is always a good thing. And the Let them eat cake in the beginning. Ha. The contrast you create of flowers and salt is interesting. Definitely a fine blend of layers.

  6. Mary says:

    Very, very clever, De. Loved “a squeaking in tongues.” And any poem with ‘tintinnabulation’ worked into it definitely gets my attention!

  7. kanzensakura says:

    sin, tin, tintinnabulation – love that sound sequence. Wordplay, layers and cake….the spacing…all of it just works together so well.

  8. tamekamullins says:

    Playful, raw and reflective of the society that we’re living in. I would like another piece, please!

  9. Sweet, light, fruity, and goes down easy. I’ll take another slice, please.

  10. i agree with all of the above comments! It sounds so nice.
    I ate lunch w/ my first-grader today and all the kids at her table had a vote over what is best: lollipops or cake. Cake was deemed WAY better! Who can resist?

  11. Truedessa says:

    well that cake was filled with some delights…

  12. Joanne says:

    I, too, like the spring and frosting bit, but mostly I find your rhythm and parceling of words quite interesting. 🙂

  13. el34ax7 says:

    I found the line breaks exquisitely done and the use of reoccurring sounds very pleasing to the ear. It’s like having the satisfaction of rhyme without any of the sing-songiness that can arise from its use. I, too, would like cake.

  14. Cake.. truly a microcosm of life.. frosted in.. and never really returning to spring.. as long as icing is gone.. and here again..:)

  15. billgncs says:

    The perfect prompt for you De – fascinating as aways

  16. Grace says:

    How very clever De ~ Love the word/line breaks, smiles ~

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