this poem

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14 Responses to this poem

  1. This poem needs for nothing.

  2. Kathy Reed says:

    Oh, I like the bling of scattered shrine! And where is that life coach when we need him/her? Sweet little poem …with layers.

  3. Susan says:

    I would be happy to meet you in that pause.

  4. X says:

    I love the form, of addressing the poem itself. The pause between why and be adds weight to the question itself, “Why be?” Why live, Why this existence. What is my purpose? The need for something beyond our own hum- is another zinger of a line. In some ways we all feel that need.

    • whimsygizmo says:

      X,
      I love these, too. Sometimes when I’m stuck, I just start with that title phrase (I think there are 3 or 4 poems titled that now, here on my blog, and others in notebooks, I’m sure.) It allows the poem to reveal itself, I suppose.

      I also wanted that hanging “be” to be able to wrap back up to its beginning line, and become “because.”

  5. This reminds me of a poet named Roberta Spear from my area in California in her poem called “A Poem of Her Own”.

  6. coalblack says:

    No worries, cos apparently this poem has an agent!

    merowww

  7. So many needs that we all have. I, too, liked the why – be thought. In other words, sometimes we need to stop with the why and just accept things as they are. Because and that’s why.

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