A Perfect Curve Ball Navigates the Straight & Narrow


Screenshot 2015-05-15 08.24.55written for dVerse.

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15 Responses to A Perfect Curve Ball Navigates the Straight & Narrow

  1. Throwing both dagger and daisy,. what a wonderful line for the confidence felt in love… the contrast to the last stanza make this really wonderful.. Thank you for sharing.

  2. Mary says:

    Very, very clever use of antithesis. Really like ‘full moon and empty sky.’ Cool word play!

  3. el34ax7 says:

    Clacked?! What a wonderful word! Your line breaks are, once again, well placed. I find reading them and reading over and through them to play with how I glean the meaning. This also plays into my sense of ‘antithesis’ in addition to the “slow fasting” and “dagger throwing” apparent in the poem.

  4. “Black and white” always makes me think of playing chess. … I LOVE “See her toe the line.” Awesome. 🙂 “Catch him throwing both dagger and daisy” … Ooh, I like that too. But the last five lines are my favorites.

  5. Ah.. yes.. to be hated
    and loved well in life..
    IS TO LIVE..
    WELL.. AS
    WELL
    DOES
    BE..:)

  6. kanzensakura says:

    The title of this is just wonderful beyond words….dagger and daisy, clacked….just a super write and an even more wonderful read. I enjoyed this muchly.

  7. DELL CLOVER says:

    Wow, I love this one.

  8. Gabriella says:

    Wonderful exploration of the concept of antithesis! Unusual imagery that stretches our imagination.

  9. What a feast of wonderful phrases and contrasts. If I picked out my favorite I’d end up copying and pasting the whole thing.

  10. kaykuala says:

    The first stanza beginning with black and white makes the anti-thesis so apparent. It is followed through with fine lines De! Great!

    Hank

  11. Great job combining opposites smoothly – I did not even realize that’s what you were doing on my first reading. The end one of full moon – empty sky – is especially effective!

  12. your push and pull from margin to margin, top to bottom, makes for a tight write De! Beautiful metaphors and crazy sane-words.

  13. Glenn Buttkus says:

    A tight write, indeed; excellent poem that stands alone as sentinel to your talent; imaginative expert use of opposites as well, each of them strong. As others I like the lines /catch him/throwing dagger &/daisy/. Might even use that for alternate title: DAGGER & DAISY.

  14. Hey, I’m a bit crazy-sane… it works 😉 haha. Great wordplay!!

  15. C.C. says:

    Great inclusion of the parenthetical additions. They really add an extra dimension here 🙂

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