Once Upon a Suitcase, a Shattered Vase, and a Soundtrack

She’s packed.

Alanis is playing fast and loose
…………….with her angry heart,
and the car won’t quite start but the
tank is full and she’s a fool for a fat moon
and some scattered stars, the slap

of asphalt under tires that just might
know the way to freedom. There’s a black
sky rising, reprising the dark rhythms of
her own unmapped heart. She’s back

to humming out loud
and welcoming broken
things: scattered yellow lines
…………….and scars that sing.






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6 Responses to Once Upon a Suitcase, a Shattered Vase, and a Soundtrack

  1. Shawna says:

    Best title ever, dude. I completely love this poem and want to live inside it. Especially the girl in a car listening to Alanis part; she’s been driving through the night, taking this awesome her-only road-trip. Unfortunate circumstances, of course, seeing as she angrily through that vase (at some man, I presume) and then left him. “Packed” also makes me think she has a gun. Plus, she has six-pack abs. 😉

    With the first line being white-spaced and the other indented lines, I see this mini-poem: “She’s packed, with her angry heart and scars that sing.” Something good is going to come out of this broken glass; she’s determined. And really, there’s nothing a girl can’t conquer, given the right soundtrack (and suitcase pattern).

    This is my favorite, by the way: “the slap / of as(s)phalt/fault” … this makes me wonder if he was slapping someone else’s ass. In other words, she caught him cheating.

    I think that “She’s back” says it all. In a lot of ways, he took away who she was. That’s almost always how it goes in relationships … until you find “the one.” Also, The One (which I think is who filled up her t[h]ank[s]).

    Thank YOU for this poem, my dear; I love it.

    • whimsygizmo says:

      I knew you’d love that title. It took me awhile to get it right. That middle thing didn’t know what it wanted to be. I know I say this often, but I cannot even begin to tell you what your readings mean to me.

  2. Love it! I’m amazed by your creativity and ease with language … it just flows and sets a great scene. 🙂

  3. ihatepoetry says:

    This is the best kind of read: effortless and entertaining. I like how you wove in Alanis, esp since its the 20 year anniversary of “jagged Little Pill.” You oughta know.

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