following stars

the sky is ours
tonight, black as silk
and bright with promise.

we’re counting pinpricks
of light, keeping time only
by a melting moon.

orion has loosed his belt, felt
our need for bright things to
lead our wandering:

sizzled wishes,
pillars of fire,


Toni’s awesome star prompt over at dVerse. Come play! 



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18 Responses to following stars

  1. You paint a gorgeous picture!

  2. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    I especially adore the opening lines! Such an exquisite write 😀

  3. Misky says:

    Melting moon, that’s inspired.

  4. S says:

    Um, ex-ka-use me! This is HOT!

    • whimsygizmo says:

      I knew you’d have fun with this one, S. Some stuff in there, just for you. 😉

      • S says:

        LOL … cracking up at “S KY” and “counting pin/pen pricks.” 🙂

        “S is lead/led; why she’s pill-arse, soft ire.” “See louds.” (Yes, she definitely “sees” too loudly!) I guess you’re right; she does have an “or eye” … and it’s on the “you” to whom you’re speaking. 😉 It seems you’re the one “following star(e)s.”

        Love that “black as S ilk” too. We do have a need for bright things, don’t we?

  5. Orion’s loosened belt.. and melting moon.. There are wishes in that… 🙂

  6. Grace says:

    Love that the sky and all its gifts – melting moon, sizzled wishes, pillars of fire – are ours for the taking and wishing – Amazing gift of words De ~

  7. kanzensakura says:

    I think I’m the only one who didn’t read sexuality into this. I just enjoyed the lovly description of two people counting the stars under the melting moon. Indeed, at night towards dawn, it seems the moon does melt among the stars going to sleep. Beautiful poem. Thank you for participating in this prompt!

  8. Bodhirose says:

    I love your opening verse and we always need bright things to lead our way.
    Gayle ~

  9. Kathy Reed says:

    A great perspective (I know almost exactly the place your feet are propped in the main photo ;):)
    and you nailed it well in that less is more in this case. Love black silk sky.

  10. This is just breath-taking, Dee. Love those pinpricks of light.

  11. Mary says:

    May those sizzled wishes come to fruition!

  12. Sumana Roy says:

    “the sky is ours”…love has this infinite space…ah magical moments indeed when moon melts….

  13. Prajakta says:

    Orion loosed belt… This line really caught my eye 🙂 Lovely!

  14. Ava Hypatia says:

    I think I just read a very different star poem….must read over and over!

  15. Bryan Ens says:

    That last word: “clouds”…it’s such a lovely contrast to the beautiful star-scape that you have painted.

  16. FLuFfy whiTe clOUds
    children of Stars
    yes.. pENpricKs
    Yes.. YES!

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