to the poet who urged me travel,gladly be{yond}

excerpt from
somewhere i have never travelled,gladly beyond
E.E. Cummings:
(i do not know what it is about you that closes
and opens;only something in me understands
the voice of your eyes is deeper than all roses)
nobody,not even the rain,has such small hands

(read the whole poem here.)

 




you gave hands to the rain,

carried my heart
(root of root, bud of bud, sky of sky,
………..sane)
in droplets and
far and wee balloons.

i, too,
………am un
-enamored of hum
…..-anity, the in
-sanity that comes
from scattered spill,
the erotic fill
of words that bump
and grind and p l a y .

shall we
(together at last) pitter-
ponder the moon, undress
her, press her to our skin
and hold within some small
light? ………..you

showed me dooms and sames
and ever better fates
and how to swear by
flower, flutter. enough.

how
……(now)
holy to be a fool. un
-spool my self
in ribbons of phrase,
graze the sky in sigh
-lence

wholly kissed,
blood approved, sans
………………{parens}
.

 

 

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A response poem for Mary’s prompt over at dVerse. 

 

 

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20 Responses to to the poet who urged me travel,gladly be{yond}

  1. Mary says:

    Wow, De, I can definitely see how e.e.cummings has influenced you! (I never really realized that before, but after reading both poems today I can see it SO clearly! Smiles.) I read YOUR poem, then looked back at his, then yours again…and, ha, you have traveled ‘beyond,’ and I think he would enjoy your work if only….. And being able to ‘unspool’ oneself ‘in ribbons of phrase’ is a developed talent…and I think you’ve got it!

  2. Sienna says:

    “the erotic fill
    of words that bump
    …and grind and p l a y”

    Ha ha ha. They ARE a naughty bunch of kids, aren’t they?

    Oh wow, I love this:
    “and how to swear by
    flower, flutter. enough.”

    And this:
    “blood approved, sans
    ………………{parens}”

    Oh my. You are so consistently good.

  3. Oh I actually KNEW you would take e.e. and you simply aced this. So many stunning turns here.. I cannot copy every line is perfect. I’m in awe.

  4. I love this, with your lines and the borrowed lines together. This phrase stood out; “hold within some small
    light”

  5. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Such an exquisite write De 😀

  6. Glenn Buttkus says:

    You wear Cummings like a second skin, anticipate his moves, use his parameters, his voice, aping his style wholly & exquisitely. Yet, obviously this piece is You, personal & passionate; really a grand effort, rocking the panties off the prompt. I loved it, especially the lines /the in/-sanity that comes/from scattered spill/ & /un/spool myself/in ribbons of phrases/.

  7. Grace says:

    Love the style of Cummings, the phrasing and word breaks ~ The pressing of the moon is very sensuous and sigh/lence is just moon inspired ~

    I am enamored De with your poem 🙂

  8. C.C. says:

    I have never really read Cummings before, but after this introduction and seeing the very clear and obvious parallel between your style (which I love and enjoy so regularly) and his, I am convinced that I must check him out…and soon. This is absolutely beautiful, De 🙂

  9. Human
    sidewalks
    and language take
    angles
    iN order
    so much fear in straights
    of words
    that
    never veer from
    sidewalks
    killing
    spirals
    of uS free
    iN sacred balance..:)

  10. lucychili says:

    I like the unspooling ribbons =) and ee cummings is an amazing poet to work to hey =)

  11. Bodhirose says:

    I marvel at your style and talent, De. Superb!

  12. I see the link now between you and cummings. I have always admired your style and way with words. Awe

  13. lillian says:

    “Unspool myself in ribbons of phrase”. I especially love this line. The entire response is so well done – a response and in the style of. Stunning!

  14. David Allen says:

    I am also a great fan of e.e.cummings. You captured his spirit.

  15. whimsygizmo says:

    Thank you all, so much, for your generous words. Those of you who have compared me in ANY way to Mr. Cummings have humbled me to the core. His style isn’t for everyone, but it has always deeply inspired me, and still does.

    I LOVE all of the poems that came out of Mary’s awesome prompt!

  16. This left me utterly breathless. Beautiful.

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