somewhere i have never travelled,gladly beyond
(i do not know what it is about you that closes
and opens;only something in me understands
the voice of your eyes is deeper than all roses)
nobody,not even the rain,has such small hands
(read the whole poem here.)
you gave hands to the rain,
carried my heart
(root of root, bud of bud, sky of sky,
in droplets and
far and wee balloons.
-enamored of hum
…..-anity, the in
-sanity that comes
from scattered spill,
the erotic fill
of words that bump
…and grind and p l a y .
(together at last) pitter-
ponder the moon, undress
her, press her to our skin
and hold within some small
showed me dooms and sames
and ever better fates
and how to swear by
flower, flutter. enough.
holy to be a fool. un
-spool my self
in ribbons of phrase,
graze the sky in sigh
blood approved, sans
A response poem for Mary’s prompt over at dVerse.
Wow, De, I can definitely see how e.e.cummings has influenced you! (I never really realized that before, but after reading both poems today I can see it SO clearly! Smiles.) I read YOUR poem, then looked back at his, then yours again…and, ha, you have traveled ‘beyond,’ and I think he would enjoy your work if only….. And being able to ‘unspool’ oneself ‘in ribbons of phrase’ is a developed talent…and I think you’ve got it!
“the erotic fill
of words that bump
…and grind and p l a y”
Ha ha ha. They ARE a naughty bunch of kids, aren’t they?
Oh wow, I love this:
“and how to swear by
flower, flutter. enough.”
“blood approved, sans
Oh my. You are so consistently good.
Oh I actually KNEW you would take e.e. and you simply aced this. So many stunning turns here.. I cannot copy every line is perfect. I’m in awe.
Thanks, Bjorn. It has occurred to me that I should also, perhaps, take a less obvious path…and one that is not quite so easy for me. Hmmmm…
Maybe on who annoys you.. 🙂
I love this, with your lines and the borrowed lines together. This phrase stood out; “hold within some small
Such an exquisite write De 😀
You wear Cummings like a second skin, anticipate his moves, use his parameters, his voice, aping his style wholly & exquisitely. Yet, obviously this piece is You, personal & passionate; really a grand effort, rocking the panties off the prompt. I loved it, especially the lines /the in/-sanity that comes/from scattered spill/ & /un/spool myself/in ribbons of phrases/.
Love the style of Cummings, the phrasing and word breaks ~ The pressing of the moon is very sensuous and sigh/lence is just moon inspired ~
I am enamored De with your poem 🙂
I have never really read Cummings before, but after this introduction and seeing the very clear and obvious parallel between your style (which I love and enjoy so regularly) and his, I am convinced that I must check him out…and soon. This is absolutely beautiful, De 🙂
and language take
so much fear in straights
never veer from
of uS free
iN sacred balance..:)
I like the unspooling ribbons =) and ee cummings is an amazing poet to work to hey =)
I marvel at your style and talent, De. Superb!
I see the link now between you and cummings. I have always admired your style and way with words. Awe
“Unspool myself in ribbons of phrase”. I especially love this line. The entire response is so well done – a response and in the style of. Stunning!
I am also a great fan of e.e.cummings. You captured his spirit.
Thank you all, so much, for your generous words. Those of you who have compared me in ANY way to Mr. Cummings have humbled me to the core. His style isn’t for everyone, but it has always deeply inspired me, and still does.
I LOVE all of the poems that came out of Mary’s awesome prompt!
This left me utterly breathless. Beautiful.