Smokestacks

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We are having yet another
industrial revolution,
the pollution of all things
sane, the
(turn, turn, turn)
of seasons slanted to
-ward (something off).

Scoff if you will, with
your smoke-filled lungs
and your unquiet voice
rising into all this haze.

If I’ve only got a few
days to go,
I’m gonna spend ’em
b   r   e   a   t   h   i   n   g.

 

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10 Responses to Smokestacks

  1. Shawna says:

    I love this:
    “the pollution of all things
    sane, the
    (turn, turn, turn)
    of seasons slanted to
    -ward (something off).” … Fan-tastic double meaning in “to ward something off” and “toward something off.”

    YES to the last stanza.

  2. Shawna says:

    Also, “smoke’s tacks.” This means all the things this girl called “Smoke” tacks up on her corkboard to remember for later. 🙂

  3. I think revolution/pollution build up a splendid pair… and of course the double meaning of revolutions as in wheels a-turning… Yes I want to spend my days breathing as well.

  4. Misky says:

    I’m drawn to “industrial revolution, the pollution of all things” – that’s wonderful mix of terms or sounds.

  5. Loved this. Breathing is good.

  6. A bit of advice from an old friend of mine… “Don’t forget to breathe. It’s a sure way to prove you’re alive!”

  7. Candy says:

    well, just Wow! that ending is powerful

  8. Kathe Worsley says:

    excellent- breathing is a good thing!

  9. Embrace life with everything we have! Wonderful.

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