One Hand in My Pocket, and the Other One

 

..

Empty this broken
vessel,
this carpaled cave,
this wandered wave
of hello-good
-bye, these signs
and sighs of spring,
these unmapped veins
and palm-pressed
promises of less
inky things. Finger
-flutter them all
to some digit
-distant wall,

……..and hand me the
…………………….sky.

 

..

 

Prompted by Mish’s Poetics over at dVerse. Come lend a hand, and play! 

 

 

 

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22 Responses to One Hand in My Pocket, and the Other One

  1. I feel like raising my hands in the air cheering for spring… love the wordplay… you might say I dig it…

  2. Glenn Buttkus says:

    “and with the other one flashing a peace sign”; thanks now I have that song in my head, humming along; blending into “What if God were one of us, just a slob like one of us, all alone on the bus,” blurred into “When Jesus came to Chicago”. Nice job on this one.

  3. therisa says:

    As Bjorn mentioned, very interesting usage of wordplay, throughout the poem. And yes, I love the flow of your poem, De, as the words feel to me, like a sheet of silk, which the master seamstress has worked her magic, upon.

  4. Aria says:

    Oh good Lord. I can’t even comment on this. The innuendo sings for days! The 12-year-old in me is CRACK.ING. UP. Seriously.

  5. Grace says:

    I love the title and wicked word play De ~ ….Hand me the sky…I sigh 🙂

  6. Yes, I think you are a wordplay master. I absolutely love how you incorporated hands into this.
    “palm pressed promises”…oh my!
    “finger-flutter”…..so much fun
    And thank you for honouring one of my favourite Canadian artists in the title. 😉

  7. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Oh! such a splendid close ❤ ❤

  8. Agree with Mish. Wordplay master in the dictionary has your picture next to it!

  9. Mary says:

    Love the ending…’hand me the sky!’

  10. Such a great image of unmapped veins. Veins that tell a story.

  11. I love the flow of this piece.

  12. Bodhirose says:

    Wonderful fun as always over here, De. You truly are a master!

  13. kim881 says:

    Oh yes! Wonderful word-play, De.

  14. Bryan Ens says:

    The alliteration in this is lovely!

  15. Yearnings of spring fulfilled can be most satisfying. Wonderful poetic language De!

    Hank

  16. ghostmmnc says:

    Always interesting to read your poems, De! The way you bend the words and meanings, makes them fun to read.

  17. ShirleyB says:

    This poem reminds me of a butterfly. Great wordplay.

  18. Finger-flutter–I just love that and the whole of your poem. There is such a sense of freedom here.

  19. Hands of Love
    light feat
    and penned
    quill
    and feather
    drifts aWay..
    hAnds oF fearless..
    Strong.. and
    unafraid
    to
    Love..:)

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