While the whole moves;and every part stands still:

(The evening shade pulls over suburbia on a random Monday.)



There is chatter in the street, the hollow
thwack thwack thwack rattle of a basketball
game, the whoosh of a neighbor’s SUV.

The mesquites are tucking themselves in
under this foggy blanket silver sky. An airplane
whine lends its voice, scrapes a trail of white.

The streets were washed right clean today
by rain, and stones still glisten with its
memory. Our flowering plums have shed

flower and fruit, but their aubergine leaves
cast color against the stucco walls, staccato
calls of young children echoing.


:: I no longer know where I am going.



Check out the prompt over at NaPoWriMo, day 11, asking us to go a little James Wright today.  (With gratitude to E.E. Cummings for my title.) 

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8 Responses to While the whole moves;and every part stands still:

  1. Bryan Ens says:

    Love love LOVE that ending! Such vivid descriptions, and then the total sense of loss…

  2. Enjoyed getting lost in that poet 😉

  3. wonderful clarity…and a poignant ending

  4. Laura Bloomsbury says:

    not a word out of place! just brilliant imagery and the mixture in with sound makes it all so visible – love the bracketed subtitle

  5. ihatepoetry says:

    From the title on down, perfect, mindful Zen writing. Excellent, de!

  6. Oloriel says:

    I loved the poem, the descriptions were very vivid that I not only could imagine being there, but I even shuddered at the mention of mosquitos and used my inner voice to ask myself do I have a repellant near-by.
    Even though the ending can be seen as a dark ending, I think it is an ending full of potential. Perhaps, to offer a fresh perspective, someone who finally realises they will not be a slave to a cycle, or a rule, but are instead free to pick what they will be and which road they will take.

  7. Pingback: NaPoWriMo – Day 11 – “Bittersweet Memories Feeding The Senses” by David Ellis | toofulltowrite (I've started so I'll finish)

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