….
we toss them
…………one-by-one, watch them
…..softly shatter the Lake.
..some slip-slip-slip,
smooth as
…..silk. others kerplunk! with
……………….rippled rings.
we have things
…..to say, small
………words that need gently
thrown. but seeing
…that mirrored sky
break open stone
……………………….-by-stone,
…..we decide to skip
…………………….. it.
..
Toni’s hosting over at dVerse today for our Quadrille. Come play!
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Oh I love this….I knew you would write something wonderful for this word. “shatter the lake”…and the all out throwing upon the “mirrored sky”….joyous abandon….
Fun fun fun!
The single capitalization of Lake is intriguing – causes me to read and read again. (My home town is on one of the Great Lakes, so I connect.) Nice sound devices!
For us, Lake means Tahoe. And always, always capital. 😉 My soul lives there (it’s an 8-hour drive to visit her.)
Michigan. 2 day drive. No ocean can take the place of a wonderous lake, can it?
I love the ocean, too. But yes, Lake Tahoe blue holds my soul.
I grew up in Ohio, and we fished on Eerie, so “THE” Lakes are a bit familiar to me, also.
Oh I love how you contrast the two stanza, letting the first stanza become a metaphor for the words we skip… simply brilliant.
Interesting piece,greetings!
This is such a great take on the prompt. I mainly really like how you structure it. I feel like the structure tells the story. Great job.
I was never any good at skipping stone; getting better at the little words. Very nice quadrille. I love how the formatting enhanced the visual of the skipping stones.
softly shatter the L/ache (love ache)
The first two lines of the second stanza have a sweet jazz beat behind them.
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Beautiful. I especially like the final stanza. Some days are just too lovely to waste.
Loved, esp knowing how some stones need to be gently thrown.
I love the sounds your words make on the page and in my mind ~ I specially love: softly shatter the Lake.
I like the idea of the words being gently thrown…yes, we should choose them carefully and deliver with a gentle toss. Lovely thoughts here, De.
This makes me thing of childhood days. Well done.
….we have things to say…..and comparing the words to skipping stones — some gently and hopefully none hurled. Really love this one. Excellent response to the prompt.
A fabulous poem, De! I never got the hang of skipping stones but I did write poem on a similar theme recently: https://madhatterpoetry.com/2016/03/31/perfect-skipping-stone/ 🙂
the little words we don’t throw are sometimes the most important. Glad I didn’t skip reading this
After the sounds of the first two stanzas, that final stanza is so peaceful – like the pebble is skipping the water without any sound at all. Calm and relaxing. Sparkling.
I like the way the shape echos the words
Wonderful, where you took this.
So much wisdom in this one, De. Choose carefully. I wouldn’t mind printing this and sticking it on the wall as a reminder.