I was just making a wish. I swear.

 

Have I somehow stunned
f    a    r    e    w    e    l    l
into this sky with stars?

You’ve waved, as though this
breeze might carry you away.

If I simply spill here, falling
broken,
can I convince you to stay?

 

 

written for dVerse Poetics. come play! 

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16 Responses to I was just making a wish. I swear.

  1. Shawna says:

    I love how, when stretched, “farewell” becomes “fairy well.”

  2. I loved this. The briefness, like a twinge of unbearable sadness that passes through you before you master yourself and push it back. I love the drawn out farewell; how the poem captures and freezes this moment in time before a parting. And the appeal at the end of the poem is touching in its sincerity

  3. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Such power in the brevity of your verse ❤
    Beautifully penned (as always) 🙂

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

  4. Glenn Buttkus says:

    A farewell that came to the lips, then morphs into reality; strong imaginative focused take on the prompt.

  5. kanzensakura says:

    That long farewell. Oh my heart, how this caused me to read and re-read several times.

  6. That second stanza I really like… there’s something so poetic about a wave, an old, almost forgotten wave.

  7. thotpurge says:

    Oh I love the last stanza… a plea that rises to the stars..

  8. The stretched farewell made me think how difficult it is to part… wonderful

  9. lillian says:

    I love everything about this! Especially the middle stanza. Wonderful!

  10. Bryan Ens says:

    Those are the worst goodbyes. ..where one is eager to leave, and the other wishes to cling forever

  11. Waltermarks says:

    Being left to fare well on your own without reprise is cruel indeed. No repast or final goodbye is unsettling

  12. Loved this – been there… it’s so hard.

  13. Abhra says:

    Very very heartfelt – your words spoke to me.

  14. Grace says:

    Love the ending words De ~

  15. Stay? You had me at f a r e w e l l! I’m not going anywhere! 😉 Sweetly done, De. Sweetly Dundee? I think I know her! Love it, Lady!

  16. SMiLes.. i neVer say
    goodbye.. as i kNow/
    FeeL/SeNse.. thE trUth oF morE
    InFiNiTy iN liGht foreVermorEnoW
    Now.. ALL.. AH.. iS SEE yA LAtER WaY..
    AnD yeS.. i SMiLeS And neVer
    ends a story.. fiNish..
    beGinS alWays
    noW A StARt FoR Art.. DroP oF
    waTerstreAMsRiVerOceaNwHole..:)

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