Summer Salt

 

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Had I told the sea of my longing, my
wanting, the quiet haunting of my heart

for wave and salt, it might have prepared
itself for these feet. It might have treated

my tumbled edges less like seaglass and
more like fragile wings floating. Had I told

the breeze that I needed a sign, a sigh, a
reason why and how (and what the hell) to

spell myself in fragments, shells, it might
have sent me something softer than all this

sand. Had I bid the land adieu (to you and
you and you)
and willed these limbs to fins

and breathed in bubbled bliss, I might have
missed the pieces of myself that wash ashore.

If I hold the sea with quiet hands, collected
tears, these salted years of summer just might

add themselves up to more than sorrow. If I
borrow one last low spelunking moon, golden

in its own dipped head, I might just find my soul
in all that’s left of crimson thread-etched song.


 

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Prompted by Walt’s summer starters over at dVerse. I was inspired by a line from Nizar Qabbani’s “In the Summer.” (Check out Walt’s post for some great summer writing inspiration.)

 

 

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23 Responses to Summer Salt

  1. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    and breathed in bubbled bliss, I might have
    missed the pieces of myself that wash ashore.

    Absolutely gorgeous writing, De ❤
    Love this poem soo much!

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

  2. I teetered toward Qabbani’s poem, but went a different route. But you so totally rocked this prompt, my friend. I wish your lake for you as well!

  3. Victoria says:

    There are so many beautiful images in this I don’t know where to start. Before here, I lived in Half Moon Bay, a half mile from the ocean. I loved to walk to the beach after crazy days at work, just sit on a cliff over-looking the waves, and let go. As I read this I kept finding words I’d want to use for a Quadrille prompt.

  4. jillys2016 says:

    Excellent structure – Terribly impressed 🙂

  5. Michael says:

    As always De you write exquisitely. Love your take on your Summer.

  6. Sherry Marr says:

    WOW! Gorgeous…..culminating in those spectacular closing lines.

  7. Such a lovely piece. And in the middle, a bit of fun with “Sound of Music!” You never fail to start my day with a smile. Thanks.

  8. I love it, the summer seducing, feet being lured to the sea, reading it feels like warm sand under bare feet.. Wonderful.

  9. kim881 says:

    It might have treated
    my tumbled edges less like seaglass and
    more like fragile wings floating…

    spell myself in fragments, shells…

    You’ve slain me, De!

  10. De, your whimsical poem with its inklings of sadness, touched me deeply. I’m so glad to have read it (three times!).

  11. Kir Piccini says:

    This is beautiful.

  12. lillian says:

    The imagery, the longing, the feel and sight and smell of summer — absolutely beautifully done.

  13. It might have treated
    my tumbled edges less like seaglass and
    more like fragile wings floating.

    What a lovely phrase. I love the way you personify nature in this poem.

  14. kanzensakura says:

    This would be a total copy and paste of the whole poem of lines I love. I kept trying to pull a couple out and couldn’t. This is such a total thing of beauty and longing and peace.

  15. Oh, I sense the loveliness of summer and a pain or sorrow associated with it, the lush, flowery warm season and the crashing waves of a salty sea…or is it salt in a reopened wound?

  16. This is simply gorgeous. I love the repetition and the word play. So very well done.

  17. This is quite sublime and thoughtful. I love your internal rhyming. My favorite part is:

    If I hold the sea with quiet hands, collected
    tears, these salted years of summer just might

    add themselves up to more than sorrow.

  18. Shawna says:

    Summer Salt / Somersault … very clever!

  19. Every line in this poem was beautiful. 🙂

  20. Mish says:

    I am speechless, De. Ok..just a little…
    This is simply brilliant in my opinion. I see circles, connections in your poem …of sea and breeze and sand…..that lead to acceptance in the end. A profound piece to treasure!

  21. This is such a beautiful piece! Artfully written. 🙂

  22. A stunning, rhythmically satisfying, subtly rhyming poem, full of beauty. hese lines, especially, were exquisite and moving:
    “Had I bid the land adieu (to you and
    you and you) and willed these limbs to fins

    and breathed in bubbled bliss, I might have
    missed the pieces of myself that wash ashore.”

    (Nice little reference to “The Sound of Music” there, by the way!)

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