If I’m made in Your image, why is it I see
so little of You, and so much of me?
– Question from the Girl in the Mirror, De Jackson 2010
..
As if hope were an echo
or a nod
or the crimson shine of dawn,
we raise our heads
and hands
and hearts,
our breath
to free the seeds and softly plead
with fallen shards of sky.
Me?
(oh, my)
I’m fracture-falling,
too, and forever
wishing to find
(perhaps)
more
(or less)
of myself
on the other
less fragile side.
..
Over at dVerse Poetics today, Mish has us pondering wishes. Come play!
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Fracture falling… love that.. sounds exactly where we are… more falling than failing…
I love “Me/(oh, my) …” A very clever take on that turn of phrase. Also the last two lines of your first stanza — great sound!
It is we, yes, poets & dreamers the stoke philosophic meanderings & leaps of faith. I love the emotion & yet pragmatic poetic approach you’ve taken here. I like the lines /to free the seeds & softly plead/with fallen shards of sky/–wordsmithing supremo.
Great phrase, fracture-falling! I love the notion of hope being the crimson shine of dawn. Being a bit of an insomniac, I get to see that every morning!
Sigh such beautiful phrasing here ❤ with ‘Me? (oh, my) I’m fracture-falling, too, and forever wishing to find’ ❤ Profound write.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
I agree with Glenn. Your wordsmithing is superb in this poem. And fracture falling….i love being the crimson shine of dawn. Wonderful wishful poem.
The flow is like a soft tumbling of words…I loved every wishful breath of this.
Such a prayer, really, De. I could visualize the shattering of glass, of all those false images in the fracture-falling. Love this.
Best title ever. Love the quote too.
This is my favorite part of the poem:
“to free the seeds and softly plead
with fallen shards of sky.
Me?
(oh, my)
I’m fracture-falling”
Oh, the last two lines as well:
“on the other
less fragile side”
I love your forever wish, may it be true 🙂
Me oh my 😊.
I love the quotation you’ve begun with and then to shift to fracture falling — how much of me is in those wishes on the fallen shards of sky? So much to think about here…. I’ve read this several times….
Really enjoyed this take on the prompt!
If I’m made in Your image, why is it I see
so little of You, and so much of me?
– Question from the Girl in the Mirror, De Jackson 2010 …. Love every single thing about this poem!!!
I like this, particularly the “coinless fountains” – I remember those 🙂 and the Question from the Girl in the Mirror!
Hmm.. you juSt noW.. De..
reminded me of something
hEar.. i read A book.. don’t sweat
the small stuff but i didn’t have nearly
enough mastery
over mind
and body balance
to do that then..
hmm.. perHaps
fulfilling just A simple
wish of being wHoly iN
control within is truly
the meaning
of liFe
whOLE
iN Mastery oF
control with relative trUe
Free WiLL oVer Fearless Love..
Thanks.. you just
helped
me write
the meaning
of A liFe.. too..
aLL.. now.. A
Day
in The Life..
i guess.. oh My
God.. i finAlly get
the answer to the question..
posed in that SonG.. by the Beatles
iN what they were reAlly trying to turn us on.. too..
ending
In A
KeY
of E-Long Wish..;)
You’ve lived up to the name “whimsy” with this one. Beautiful.
My favorite part? Fracture-falling. Such great word use. And what an image!
Oh my, this is beautiful work. It really resonates.
Fracture-falling… yes, I love that. I have all kinds of images in my head now!