Sesame Sky

Oh, it says:
keep your eyes open
and your words crossed
and your heart tossed
onto indigo inkspill scrim.

No, it says:
not like that. No
wielded fiery dragon skin,
no withered place within
or lost land waiting.

Just this:
horizon smoke;
sprinkled-over hope.

 


Victoria is hosting the Quadrille over at dVerse today. Come play!ย 

 

 

 

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31 Responses to Sesame Sky

  1. indigo inkspill scrim
    That is one delicious phrase. Reading this aloud, so many wonderful poetic devices like alliteration, just make for delight. Smoke and hope–the stuff of which we are made.

  2. Love that this ends with hope. Plus it’s just so cute from beginning to end.

  3. I do love that dragon… anything with dragons has to be good.

  4. MarinaSofia says:

    Lovely flow and rhythm to this (I do appreciate great-sounding poetry and rhymes and plays on words). Particularly like the reversal of expectations with the ‘heart tossed’ and the ‘words crossed’ (instead of ‘cross my heart’ and ‘toss the words’), yet also the lin to crosswords.

  5. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Another very clever use of the Q44, tremendous word smithing, & workable rhyme. I too, like the line /into indigo inkspill scrim/–may have to borrow “inkspill” one day.

  6. I echo Bjorn – anything with dragons…! I love your wordplay ๐Ÿ™‚

  7. A painting and a recipe all in one, I thought. So creative, De, thanks for sharing!

  8. kanzensakura says:

    Love the inkspill and the dragon! Love all 44 words.

  9. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    LOVE โค especially the image of ‘horizon smoke; sprinkled-over hope’

  10. ihatepoetry says:

    Very lovely, esp what Victoria noted and this:
    “horizon smoke;
    sprinkled-over hope.”

  11. Brian says:

    I sense the open pages of a book. Very flowing and imaginative.

  12. Bodhirose says:

    There seems to be some difference of interpretation going on…love that last verse, De!

  13. Wow! This is amazing word artistry! My heart was taken to new heights.

  14. thotpurge says:

    indigo inkspill scrim….like that!!

  15. Sumana Roy says:

    ” words crossed” almost like keeping fingers crossed…ah..poems need them that way ๐Ÿ™‚

  16. Mish says:

    LOVE this. I see someone reading messages from the sky….open to interpretation.

  17. kim881 says:

    I love the way you’ve only hinted at the prompt in the title, De – and only one mention of the word ‘open’ in the whole Quadrille! Clever use of rhyme and rhythm in this one and the ‘indigo inkspill scrim’ is adorable! With dragons and hope!

  18. maria says:

    “horizon smoke;
    sprinkled-over hope.” ~ really, really beautiful De. Since our weather here is a complete opposite, I’ll just close my eyes. ๐Ÿ™‚

  19. Bryan Ens says:

    Love “sprinkled-over hope”. Wonderful use of rhythm and rhyme.

  20. othermary says:

    Lovely to read and to speak. Do you ever read any of your work aloud?

  21. Smoke of clouds
    cover eYes with
    paint of God
    more
    than
    words
    ever will..
    open or closed..
    as clouds always
    change as smoke
    more than pens
    wield.. no..
    closedfullnoW..:)

  22. Shawna says:

    Of course you went the “open, sesame” route. ๐Ÿ™‚ Which so wants to jump into Sesame Street. It also hides “see/say same,” which makes me think of talking to ourselves in the mirror. I think there are so many people in the mirror that this girl is confused about what she’s supposed to do. In the end, the smoke indicates that the dragon (probably the girl) set everything on fire and destroyed it all. But then there’s a big bowl of hope at the end (which is ice cream, of course) … with sprinkles on top. ๐Ÿ™‚ So the world is all fallen and burned up, but she’s just ignoring it, pretending nothing happened, and licking her sugar cone.

  23. lynn__ says:

    I enjoyed the word play and rhyme in this whimsical piece!

  24. Truedessa says:

    you had me at dragon…

  25. This is beautiful! โค

  26. horizon smoke;
    sprinkled-over hope.

    One is alive to tendencies of success or even just salvation where there is hope. One can never likely go wrong but with hope!

    Hank

  27. Delightful throughout…and the ending!

  28. Imelda says:

    A delight to read.

  29. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Good thing you’re watching so acutely!

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