Sky Sliver Waiting

Shadow that wily moon.
Letโ€™s find a way to make her
swoon to something
besides
this scattered sky,
these changing tides.

She needs a good spanking,
really. A hankering for something other
than salt,
water;
the quiet waning of crescent,
the dust of stars.

 

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I’m hosting the (oops, early today, don’t ask) Quadrille prompt over at dVerse.
Come play!ย 

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39 Responses to Sky Sliver Waiting

  1. kim881 says:

    What are you doing to that poor old ‘wily moon’? Spanking! But honestly, this is wonderful, De! I love the pattern of full rhyme rhyme with ‘swoon/moon’ and near rhyme with ‘spanking/hankering’ that gives it a playful air. I also love the contrast between the two stanzas, from ‘scattered sky’ and ‘changing tides’ (quite disorganised, really) to the calm of the ‘quiet waning of crescent,/the dust of stars’.

  2. annell4 says:

    Lovely way to look at the moon!

  3. Oh I do think that wily moon needs spanking too… Maybe she would wane a little less.

  4. Love your sweet chiding our our dear moon. In fact, she does do weird things to me…not hair growing on the face, just sleepless night and crabby days after. The title is exquisite.

  5. kim881 says:

    Reblogged this on writing in north norfolk and commented:
    I just had to reblog this wily moon!

  6. Oh, this is playful and mysterious and lovely all at the same time. I’m all awestruck. I love it all, probably liking the scattered sky best. I know those skies.

  7. I like this, funny and feisty. And thanks for the prompt!

  8. Brian says:

    You know me, I’m all about spanking, but I love the shadow dance as the wily moon plays tag with the sun as the stars bathe in salt water.

  9. Incongruous – unless the moon was … but no, there’s no excuse.

  10. Ha! I enjoyed the idea of giving the moon a quick spanking! Lovely… and thank you for hosting tonight!

  11. lillian says:

    Spank the moon!!! Somehow I keep thinking of “twirking-” is that the name for it? A modern new dance move! Oh that wiley moon!!!

  12. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Oh! โค๏ธ Such playfulness in your verse here, De โค๏ธ especially love the images of ‘the quiet waning of crescent, the dust of stars.’ Beautifully executed.

  13. Ha. Was that wily moon related to that Wile E. Coyote.
    He certainly could have used a spanking….
    for those of you who do not know Mr. Coyote:

    Randy

  14. Grace says:

    I love the use of shadow in your poem De ~ She needs a good spanking, smiles ~

  15. Sorry. I meant to only show the link, not insert the cartoon. Randy

  16. Bodhirose says:

    I love this playful and fun, with a bit of a reprimand, homage to that wily moon. Yes, maybe she does need a change of scenery!

  17. Glenn Buttkus says:

    In some regard, the sun needs to do the spanking just before the silver sliver wench fades & flees; just saying.

  18. frankhubeny says:

    Interesting idea that the moon needs a spanking.

  19. How delightful and playful.

  20. Bryan Ens says:

    I never thought of the moon needing a spanking ๐Ÿ™‚

  21. thotpurge says:

    Clever use of the prompt…loved it

  22. Candy says:

    oh De, must we spank that dear old moon ๐Ÿ˜‰

  23. Mish says:

    I always love the journey of your imagination. Yes, that silly moon needs a change of scenery. She doesn’t get out much, does she? Well, not entirely!

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  25. maria says:

    Such a very playful piece, De! ๐Ÿ™‚

  26. This is wonderfully playful and so well crafted, brilliant! :o)

  27. Kay says:

    I think I sometimes feel just like this moon. This is stunning, De.

  28. Oh my. Spanking the moon. Is that the metaphorical moon, as in the one we show when mooning someone? ๐Ÿ˜‰ Good work on a unique and playful poem, De. Watch out moon, De’s on your tail! Hehe ๐Ÿ™‚

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  30. i muSt saY..
    i loVe A
    sHadow
    sUn noW
    iN poEtic
    inteRAction..
    Moon kNows
    no fool
    but
    dArk..
    wiTh no
    shaDow joY..:)

  31. Shawna says:

    You are SO funny. ๐Ÿ™‚

    “Letโ€™s find a way to make her
    swoon to something”

    “She needs a good spanking,
    really. A hankering for something other”

  32. Truedessa says:

    Spanking the moon, might add some luster…

  33. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Ha, that’s a bit different from the usual romantic views of the moon! Delicious writing.

  34. Imelda says:

    This one made me smile. Ah, naughty moon. ๐Ÿ˜Š

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