it’s a journey dance,
(one grin forward, two lulls back)
(big green splat!)
of skip and
shadow. a rose cloud
spilling itself to
it’s a jar the sky leaves
open, as bubbles
Fondly (perhaps foolishly) known as The One With All The Words,
this is a third offering for this week’s Quadrille, hosted by Kim.
I love the rhythm in your dance De and ‘it’s a jar the sky leaves open’ creates such a wonderful image :o)
I love the playful, play on words “a knick-knack-patty-melt”
You crack me up…I’m with Debi. Can’t wait to order a knick-knack-patty-melt (with lactose free cheese!)
I love the snappy dance of words ~ 🙂
Thanks, guys. This one was fun.
Well worth waiting for – yours ins the last one to read this morning and it’s woken me up with a snap, crackle and pop! I found myself getting into a rap rhythm and almost dancing to the words:
(big green splat!)’!
I love the imagery of the ‘rose cloud / spilling itself to / breeze’ and ‘a jar the sky leaves / open’. Another beauty, De!
Love it! So bouncy and fresh, great word working!
Ha.. and you leave me no choice but to try… thank heave for the hyphens… 🙂
I can’t get enough of that title. I have smiled like twenty times over that. (I’ve read your recent poems a bunch of times on my phone but was waiting to comment when I was on the computer … which is basically on life support at this point.)
This section is so great:
“(one grin forward, two lulls back)
(big green splat!)”
Love your work, as always.
That was fun to read and I wonder about that patty melt,