Crescents in an Open Sky

 

She’s got stories on her skin,
places the world has mapped
her, trapped her, set her loose
again.

She’s got scars upon her heart,
asterisks and small ellips
and reminders
that the world is good and true
and round as a fat full moon.

 

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31 Responses to Crescents in an Open Sky

  1. This is lovely… the good round moon.. (though yet a sickle in the sky)…

  2. You and Bjorn seemed to deal with the theme in a similar way. A fat full moon, or weather threatening can make those scars tingle though.

  3. I like your vivid, lunar imagery; I can relate to this.

  4. Glenn Buttkus says:

    They say that writing poetry can be a form of lunacy–nevertheless, we shall all rave on, cataloging, judging, observing, & singing our songs of (uni)verse.

  5. Interesting contrast in the scars of the heart that remind of goodness and truth. Seems like an oxymoron, but it’s not.

  6. Shawna says:

    I love the line break after “mapped,” with that hanging “her” after. It makes me read “mapped” in two syllables, as “map ped/pet.” “Ped,” meaning both “pedestrian’d” and “pedestal’d.” The world has drawn a map of/on her and then walked her (skin). It has also put her on a pedestal AND made her a pet.

    Plus, I’m picturing her as their mommy, wearing an apron … ’cause she’s baking those crescent rolls, you know.

    I adore with what you did with “ellipses” (minus the “es” of course). E lips. … Lots of little hiding funsies in this, actually. Great poem.

  7. frankhubeny says:

    I liked the “fat full moon” phrase at the end.

  8. That last line made me smile–loved this.

  9. erbiage says:

    Rave on, across the lunaverse

  10. Beautiful and positive take on the scar.

  11. Lovely all the way through and the opening line ‘she’s got stories on her skin’ is such a gem :o)

  12. kim881 says:

    Hey De! I see you’ve mapped out scars too!
    I love the title, the stories on skin and the placing of the rhymes ‘mapped’ and ‘trapped’. I also love the asterisk scars and that ‘fat full moon’. Wonderful!

  13. Grace says:

    Aand yes a reminder that there is goodness though we have scars on our hearts De ~

    Thank your for the word challenge ~

  14. thotpurge says:

    stories on skin and scars on heart… sigh..lovely.

  15. ghostmmnc says:

    It’s true you can read a persons history from the scars they’ve accumulated over their years, whether by accidents or by tattoos they have inked on their bodies. Very good! 🙂

  16. I really liked this poem and the way it floweed effortlessly.

  17. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    I particularly like the stories on her skin.

  18. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    I love the idea of scars mapped on skin.. portrays the strength a person possesses ❤️ Beautifully penned, De 🙂

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

  19. I just love this. The contrast between the way things look on the outside and the way we hold them inside, the way experiences mark us but give us strength.

  20. Bryan Ens says:

    Love this…so many scars, yet the world is still good

  21. othermary says:

    This is just lovely, and so artfully constructed. The line breaks and word choices and images – well done, you!

  22. that the world is good and true
    and round as a fat full moon.

    Even if one is hurt it should be helpful to think that there are good people too in this world!

    Hank

  23. lillian says:

    …oh smiling I am, De. LOVE your positive take her on the word…especially the “round fat full moon.” That ending put a real smile on my face! And so clever to give “body” to the scars of a poet with equating them to punctuation marks! 🙂 I like to think then, that I’m a smile face made with millions of marks that far outweigh the frowns 🙂 Really enjoyed this one!

  24. Brian says:

    Not all scars are bad.

  25. To be able to remember that the “world is true and good” is really a gift for one with “scars upon her heart.” This is beautifully written. I love the way this flows, and the subtle rhyme. Lovely!

  26. Truedessa says:

    Some scars are a reminder of the journey and help us see through the healing process.

  27. drnurit says:

    Your words make magic, De…

  28. Poignant, lovely. She sounds like a survivor to me. I finally got one posted. Life is still chaos for me, De. But this word was too good to miss.

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