this poem is a whisper

a twisted scar-shadow,
breeze-curled dance
of chance. leave it out

in the open, melted
down for songs, lulled
shimmer-safe into the
skipspark of its own dark
name. we breathe bubbles,

grin green clouds. twist
roses through our journey,
cue ink
from quiet jars.


A second Q44; the one with all the words. Come play with me at dVerseΒ 

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46 Responses to this poem is a whisper

  1. again, the cutest comma ever. and i love quiet jars.

  2. Oh the cue for those quiet jars.. love how you managed to do it dark. All the words are so bright so it’s almost impossible not to write a love poem.

  3. You are so clever, De. Love the word-combos you create to stay within the limits of the form. They are so effective, too.

  4. I love your quiet jars and the green grinning clouds, you’re rocking it with all the Q words :o)

  5. This just dances off the page.
    Great word-smithing.

  6. erbiage says:

    Oh, the charm and tyranny of words! >I weep<

  7. Love it but I have a sense there is more going on here than I ken πŸ˜‰

    • whimsygizmo says:

      Ah, take what ye find. I freely give. πŸ˜‰

      • So tell me then, what’s with the ‘using all the words’ tag?

      • whimsygizmo says:

        We’ve offered up 24 Quadrille words so far. Bjorn and I always try to write a Quadrille using all the words. As you can imagine, it gets harder and harder. This one is 44 words, with 24 of them being required.

        Here are the words, if you’re up for the challenge:
        dance, lull, bubble, grin, melt, shimmer, twist, skip, green, breeze, spill, rose, journey, jar, leaves, open, shadow, cloud, spark, cue, breath(e), scar, curl, whisper

  8. Grace says:

    Love the word combination De and the quiet jars ~

    • whimsygizmo says:

      Thanks, Grace. The word combos are the funnest thing about The Ones With All The Words. πŸ˜‰ Paul just did one, and Eric (erbiage) took up the challenge this time, too. So much fun!

  9. sanaarizvi says:

    roses through our journey,
    cue ink
    from quiet jars.


  10. Mandie Hines says:

    I think as writers we’re all looking for that pocket of people who our work speaks to, and I have to say, I’m firmly in your pocket. Beautiful work.

  11. beautiful work, De πŸ™‚

  12. rosemawrites says:

    stunning. enchanting. the itsy bitsy comma opens this poem effectively. πŸ™‚

  13. Iris says:

    Love these:
    “a twisted scar-shadow”
    “skipspark of its own dark”
    “we breathe bubbles” … which I first read as “we beach bubbles” … like instead of beached whales, they’re beached bubbles, giant ones, just hanging out on the sand, people-watchin’ πŸ™‚

  14. ‘breeze curled dance of chance’ – sent me spinning. LOVE this, De!

  15. LadyInRead says:

    you make writing beautiful poetry so effortless (and i know by my trials/poems that it is not!)..
    and loved to discover the challenge you and Bjorn have using the previous quadrille words!!
    agree with Mandie πŸ™‚
    and loved ‘shimmer-safe into the skipspark’

  16. Teresa says:

    Love the rhythm of this piece. Great use of color.

  17. Olga says:

    Hi De. You’ve inspired me to try the 24 word challenge in a quadrille. I’ve already written it, Just have to find an image to suit it. Will post tomorrow. πŸ™‚

  18. lillian says:

    cue ink from quiet jars!
    Yep — that’s what happened with this prompt — bazillions of entries πŸ™‚

  19. Shadows..
    you muSt
    be as Irish
    as eYe to wRite i like this..;)

  20. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Brilliant and beautiful – again.

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