all the space that remains


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…..a silver moonsmile;

……………….the stubble of stars.

 

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Prompted by Poets United. Come play! 

 

 

 

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12 Responses to all the space that remains

  1. Shawna says:

    Oh mah gosh. This is awesome! I love how you set up “all eyes” by stacking “all” over the colon.

    Stars as stubble on his face … how gorgeous and clever.

  2. Nothing wrong with one or two line poems! Very zen-like space.

  3. Mary says:

    Love this! Why use lots of words when the point can be made with few!

  4. Myrna Rosa says:

    Umm. So much space before that colon. Very smart. Like this.

  5. Miss Stacy says:

    oh, my goodness. your words!
    you gave me a complete visual with so few.

  6. thotpurge says:

    Gorgeous… you rocked this one!

  7. Susan says:

    :

    Shaved a shade closer, and the stars would disappear in space while the moon watched.

  8. kaykuala h says:

    Certainly more difficult writing with less! Great take De!

    Hank

  9. Sumana Roy says:

    Wow!! you’ve made Space so visual!!

  10. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Man this is awesome!! ❤️

  11. Sherry Marr says:

    Oh my goodness. The best lines ever. GORGEOUS!

  12. jammy7000 says:

    Less is more! Lovely!

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