Specter Moon

(an Aubade)

 

..

Dawn breaks
us open,
unspoken
and changed,
rearranged.

We say
our goodbyes,
our last gull cries,
our vast pulled tides
and ardent waves.

Sun rises;
moon falls,
a balance
like breathing.

She’s nothing
but a ghost
in a morning sky,
and I
………am waning.

 

..
Prompted by Kim’s Quadrille over at dVerse. Come play! 

 

 

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18 Responses to Specter Moon

  1. This is absolutely breathtaking, kiddo.

  2. frankhubeny says:

    The moon does seem to disappear like a ghost when the Sun rises. Interesting that the “I” in the poem is also waning.

  3. kim881 says:

    Beautifully done, De! Those opening lines are breathtaking and I love the rhymes and contrasts.

  4. The second to last stanza is spectacular l
    That balance like breathing

  5. ihatepoetry says:

    Great images and form.

  6. Grace says:

    I love the ending lines De ~ Gorgeous writing as always ~

  7. Truedessa says:

    Beautiful words and I am always attracted to the sun and moon dance of words

  8. Janice says:

    I like the way the human story overlaps and mirrors the sky and celestial events. Your final stanza is very moving.

  9. The second verse especially is so well wound together in word imagery & thank you for introducing me to an aubade poem – now this is how to salute the breaking day

  10. kaykuala h says:

    Sun rises; moon falls,
    a balance like breathing.

    The moon loses out in the ensuing morning sky, ghost-like. It is not quite a balance! Yes!

    Hank

  11. sanaarizvi says:

    Such a stellar close!❤️

  12. kanzensakura says:

    Oh that second verse…wonderful imagery and wordsmithing here.

  13. Olga says:

    “Dawn breaks -us open” made me quiver. A play on the unexpected. Wonderful. ❤

  14. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Gorgeous, on many levels.

  15. Lovely comparison, De, in a equally lovely poem.

  16. I love the balance in this, and that stunning ending.

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