Specter Moon

(an Aubade)

 

..

Dawn breaks
us open,
unspoken
and changed,
rearranged.

We say
our goodbyes,
our last gull cries,
our vast pulled tides
and ardent waves.

Sun rises;
moon falls,
a balance
like breathing.

She’s nothing
but a ghost
in a morning sky,
and I
………am waning.

 

..
Prompted by Kim’s Quadrille over at dVerse. Come play! 

 

 

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18 Responses to Specter Moon

  1. This is absolutely breathtaking, kiddo.

  2. frankhubeny says:

    The moon does seem to disappear like a ghost when the Sun rises. Interesting that the “I” in the poem is also waning.

  3. kim881 says:

    Beautifully done, De! Those opening lines are breathtaking and I love the rhymes and contrasts.

  4. The second to last stanza is spectacular l
    That balance like breathing

  5. ihatepoetry says:

    Great images and form.

  6. Grace says:

    I love the ending lines De ~ Gorgeous writing as always ~

  7. Truedessa says:

    Beautiful words and I am always attracted to the sun and moon dance of words

  8. Janice says:

    I like the way the human story overlaps and mirrors the sky and celestial events. Your final stanza is very moving.

  9. Laura Bloomsbury says:

    The second verse especially is so well wound together in word imagery & thank you for introducing me to an aubade poem – now this is how to salute the breaking day

  10. kaykuala h says:

    Sun rises; moon falls,
    a balance like breathing.

    The moon loses out in the ensuing morning sky, ghost-like. It is not quite a balance! Yes!

    Hank

  11. sanaarizvi says:

    Such a stellar close!❤️

  12. kanzensakura says:

    Oh that second verse…wonderful imagery and wordsmithing here.

  13. Olga says:

    “Dawn breaks -us open” made me quiver. A play on the unexpected. Wonderful. ❤

  14. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Gorgeous, on many levels.

  15. Lovely comparison, De, in a equally lovely poem.

  16. I love the balance in this, and that stunning ending.

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