What Went Wayward


Blame the rain.
The way it slant-slid
off this damn tin roof,
the way we laughed
(slippery, only slightly sane)
at all the things
we thought we knew.

Listen to the sound
………..(advice)
of silence.

Then,
blame the stupid sun
for coming out again.

..
Another Q44 for dVerse. Come play! 

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13 Responses to What Went Wayward

  1. ihatepoetry says:

    Love the coda. So warm to read.

  2. Jericho says:

    I love this poem. Fantastic opening:

    “Blame the rain.
    The way it slant-slid
    off this damn tin roof”

  3. You are on fire tonight girl. Wonderful.

  4. Charley says:

    The way it slant-slid
    off this damn tin roof,
    the way we laughed
    (slippery, only slightly sane)

    Yes and yes!

  5. First, terrific use of alliteration in this and, next, be kind to the sun–I’m hopeless without him–and finally–your muse emerged from your alleged stupor.

  6. Waltermarks says:

    There’s nothing as soothing as the sound of gentle rain on a tin roof. That’s quite relaxing. On occasion we hear a tumultuous rain and hail on our poor tin roof, which is not nearly as gentle.

  7. Grace says:

    The weather here has been unpredictable as well ~ Love our opening lines ~

  8. Cynthia says:

    What a lovely piece, I love the rain too so enjoyed the reference to it on the tin roof. Gorgeous 🙂

  9. Only slightly sane… I find the joy of rain, like maybe even a wish to jump in mud… damned be sun

  10. lillian says:

    Love love love the “voice” in this. I enjoyed it the second time, reading aloud. I do love rain and the sound it makes differently on varied surfaces. One of my favorite memories is the sound of night rain on our old canvas tent as we snuggled into our joined together sleeping bags with cold noses from the chilly air. 🙂 Thanks for bringing that memory back 🙂

  11. qbit says:

    Great. Loved it.

  12. merrildsmith says:

    Love this! It made me laugh.

  13. sanaarizvi says:

    Brilliant use of alliteration here, De!❤️

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