she runs

just one
…….{mile}
to get to the
morning
(smile)
of a blushing sky.

 

 

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2 Responses to she runs

  1. Shawna says:

    I LOVE what you did with “She runs just one [faded/grey] mile.” So clever! Then how your indentation in the second line directs the reader to flip-flop “one” and “just” to get “She runs one just mile.” Also, the opening makes me think of only one eye crying (running/mascara).

    “to get to the” … What a sweet line break. 🙂 Then “morning” on its own line also becomes “mourning.” “Smile” on its own line becomes “S mile” (that’s me!). And then that gorgeous last line. I love it when you use such pretty color words to describe the sky, whether it’s sunset, sunrise, or story; you’re so good at that.

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