tempest dragon



she’s a perfect storm
-jar, leaves torn from her own ghost
-journey with a twist-curl-skip-melt-spill
from whisperwindow s(t)ill.

she’ll giggledance you a new
shimmer-spark-song-dawn, the long
-drizzle-spring of shadowballoon.

her rose-petal wings echo-breathe the sound
of open cloudbreeze, lull of bubblegrin
moon. her greenest scar’s a c(l)ue.

 

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A second Q44 for dVerse. This is the one with all the words. Come play! 

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15 Responses to tempest dragon

  1. Oh yes, and what a perfect clue… I will save myself for the 44 word quadrille.

  2. blogoratti says:

    Interesting piece, a perfect storm of rareness.

  3. Ω says:

    Because I see “temp pest” in the title, I’m picturing this being about a fill-in secretary or something.

    “leaves torn from her own ghost jar” … I love that! That makes me think of an empty tip jar (at a coffee shop, perhaps). I don’t think she’s very good at doing this job.

    Gorgeous:
    “journey with a twist-curl-skip-melt-spill
    from whisperwindow s(t)ill” … I think she wants to be on the open road, just wandering and free. But she has to make some cash here and there so that she can eat and dry off every once in a while.

    Now you’re talkin’:
    “she’ll giggledance you a new
    shimmer-spark-song-dawn, the long” … She’s much better suited to being a stripper or burlesque dancer. Entertain(h)er, if you will.

    You don’t even want to know what this makes me picture: “drizzle-spring of shadowballoon” … But I’ll tell you anyway. Her outfit is just a bunch of balloons; she strips by popping them, one by one. And as she does, that’s when you notice the “drizzlesprings” spilling. 🙂

    Beautiful: “her rose-petal wings” … I guess this is a second outfit. Pastel wings. For when she’s feeling delicate.

    Ooh, lovely: “echo-breathe the sound” … I’m crazy over that.

    Ha. I love that you started the last line with “moon her” … only there’s a period in the middle. Ew. That means she’s bleeding and so she’d like someone else to take a turn getting naked for a while.

    You take the story to another level by saying “moon her … scars.” That’s something different, isn’t it? That’s not just for fun. That’s almost like intentional torture. Mocking. Or maybe she wants you to make her sadness laugh.

    “Greenest” means jealousy. She must be a “mine, mine, mine-er.” So when you’re trying to kill a dragon, you aim for her weakest point. You’re trying to tell people that it’s her jealousy. That’s how to take her down; make her jealous. Unless the “green” has to do with money. Maybe she has a spending problem. Maybe she’s stolen or run up a bunch of credit. Ooh, or what if it’s actually a “gree nest”?! Now, to research gree …

    • Ω says:

      gree (archaic): superiority, preeminence, or victory

      Man, it sounds like she’s got a major issue with pride.

  4. Grace says:

    Wow, this is stunning De ~

  5. A very creative piece. I love your word combinations: bubblegrin, whisperwindow, shadowballoon, giggledance. Love how these sound when read aloud. Very nice.

  6. You are so clever–you and your love of hyphenation that works so well–along with the word combos. Ah, poetic license.

  7. sanaarizvi says:

    My goodness this is awesome, De!❤️

  8. Waltermarks says:

    “the long-drizzle-spring of shadowballoon.” That reminds me of the lingering pitter-patter of drizzle after the storm. When I hear that I usually figure it’s all over.

  9. Sumana Roy says:

    How I Love her ‘rose-petal wings’. She seems to be a spirit of freedom.

  10. “…the lull of bubble grin moon…”. So many perfect images here!

  11. kim881 says:

    You’ve really gone to town on this one, De! I can’t wait to see what you create with 44 words – that one could be a three-way contest between you, Bjorn and Paul!

  12. Misky says:

    What a delicious second stanza! >

  13. lillian says:

    Whisper window s(t)ill
    LOVE this! Amazing once again 😊

  14. Mandie Hines says:

    I wasn’t going to comment, because I’m trying to catch up on all the posts I’m behind on, but here I am anyway. I loved the cadence of this piece.

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