…
Did we dance? Did the stars
etch our path, fallen and pure
and lost? Did we toss the right
things to sky, and keep the
rest? Or did we hide our best
faces for those rainy days?
Have you smelled the snow?
Did you know it knows the
deepest things our hearts
are too frozen to say? If we
taste it, will it thaw the center,
for love’s sake?
And how many
licks does it
take?
..
Bjorn has us pondering questions over at dVerse Poetics from yesterday. Come play!
{I am a bit down for the count as a bad cold turned into walking pneumonia…trying to play some catchup today.}
That last stanza is even better than regularly great.
I love the landscape you paint, and especially bringing up the smell of snow… great.
Did you know it knows the
deepest things our hearts
are too frozen to say?
I love this image.
First up I hope you’re feeling better soon! Second, I’m in awe of the whole poem, it’s beautiful. I especially like the unexpectedness running throughout, the stars being fallen, pure and then lost. Smelling the snow, and how many licks will it take? So good. 😊
Excellent romp with the prompt; your inquiries stand alone–the answers less significant than the questions. Your tone & style is sweet & consistent. You thrived on this prompt.
I love the pondering and that the snow knows the things too deep to say……..
I like the idea that the snow knows way more about us than we think it does.
I will view snow in a whole new way!
Three. Superb piece here! Extraordinary questions.
Now there’s a new candy: frozen heart pops. Your poem is beautiful.
Beautiful.
…”and how many licks” My mother used to have a colloquial expression of “takin’ a lickin’ “. Now I know what she meant!
Did you know it knows the
deepest things our hearts
are too frozen to say?
This by far is the most cleverly composed question. You related it to the feelings of the heart that struck it right, De!
Hank
“did we toss the right things…” love that question. Probably the most important one of all.
LOVING this! The juxtapositioning of the snow, the frozen heart…the questions … how many licks does it take?