What have we done?



Did we dance? Did the stars
etch our path, fallen and pure
and lost? Did we toss the right
things to sky, and keep the
rest? Or did we hide our best
faces for those rainy days?

Have you smelled the snow?
Did you know it knows the
deepest things our hearts
are too frozen to say? If we
taste it, will it thaw the center,
for love’s sake?

And how many
licks does it
take?

 

..
Bjorn has us pondering questions over at dVerse Poetics from yesterday. Come play!
{I am a bit down for the count as a bad cold turned into walking pneumonia…trying to play some catchup today.} 

This entry was posted in dVerse poems and tagged , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

15 Responses to What have we done?

  1. qbit says:

    That last stanza is even better than regularly great.

  2. I love the landscape you paint, and especially bringing up the smell of snow… great.

  3. Did you know it knows the
    deepest things our hearts
    are too frozen to say?
    I love this image.

  4. ZurkPoetry says:

    First up I hope you’re feeling better soon! Second, I’m in awe of the whole poem, it’s beautiful. I especially like the unexpectedness running throughout, the stars being fallen, pure and then lost. Smelling the snow, and how many licks will it take? So good. 😊

  5. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Excellent romp with the prompt; your inquiries stand alone–the answers less significant than the questions. Your tone & style is sweet & consistent. You thrived on this prompt.

  6. I love the pondering and that the snow knows the things too deep to say……..

  7. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the idea that the snow knows way more about us than we think it does.

  8. Candy says:

    I will view snow in a whole new way!

  9. Three. Superb piece here! Extraordinary questions.

  10. Now there’s a new candy: frozen heart pops. Your poem is beautiful.

  11. Mandie Hines says:

    Beautiful.

  12. …”and how many licks” My mother used to have a colloquial expression of “takin’ a lickin’ “. Now I know what she meant!

  13. Did you know it knows the
    deepest things our hearts
    are too frozen to say?

    This by far is the most cleverly composed question. You related it to the feelings of the heart that struck it right, De!

    Hank

  14. “did we toss the right things…” love that question. Probably the most important one of all.

  15. lillian says:

    LOVING this! The juxtapositioning of the snow, the frozen heart…the questions … how many licks does it take?

Use your words.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.