Dissatisfied with underwater life


..

,
she leans on the in
-accurate knowledge of kelp,
the forbidden deep of un
-certain wayward crustacean
foes who always find a way
to pinch her toes.

she’s in the throes
of long lost vows, the way she
disguises herself in shattered shell(s),
and that (squ)id
ink
that expands into monstrous
proportions. harpoon

her hair with daddy’s
(sugar-free)
trident, heart impaled
to silent.

ask her,
and she’ll swear she truly
loves Eric,
but she’s pondering running
away with the English butler
(she’s a sucker
for the accent, and the way
he fixes fish without the fins.)

you can tell her to say cheese,
but she won’t look into the camera
(shhh, it steals her soul)
,
but she’s on a roll
when it comes to her method(s)
of coloring
this
crazy
sham
-bled
sea.

 

..
My Shawna sometimes sends me these amazing word lists. This one almost instantaneously swam itself into a poem. 


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4 Responses to Dissatisfied with underwater life

  1. Shawna says:

    You are so crazy good at this. 🙂

    Your line breaks are always beyond brilliant, but good golly, I love this (extra): “she leans on the in”

    I always love to see what you will add to the lists I give you, and what you’ve done here is just pure genius.

    I love this:
    “the forbidden deep of un
    -certain wayward crustacean
    foes”

    I can’t help but read this as:
    “she’s in the throes
    of long lost vow(el)s”

    Swooning over this masterwork:
    “disguises herself in shattered shell(s),
    and that (squ)id
    ink”

    “harpoon
    her hair with daddy’s …” You don’t want to know what this just did to my body. :X

    “(sugar-free)
    trident” … Such a smart poet.

    “trident, heart impaled
    to silent” … Isn’t that the truth.

    Love the butler/sucker rhyme.

    I just adore this parenthetical:
    “(she’s a sucker
    for the accent, and the way
    he fixes fish without the fins.)”

    You wrapped this up so smoothly, and I love how you got “coloring” in there. 🙂 Such a squid-ey(e) thing to do.

  2. Shawna says:

    This time, I read the title as “Dissatisfied With Underwear Life.”

    That’s when you REALLY need a new pack of panties. 🙂

  3. qbit says:

    “she leans on the in / -accurate knowledge of kelp,” That is just so great. The title to boot.

  4. I love your word play. It’s so creative, and adds such a range of interpretations.

Use your words.

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