..
,
won’t you hold for me
a petaled breeze
between your teeth,
speak some quiet sigh
-lence
into my hungry ear?
will you save
for me a song or two
………(a day, a year)
from this crushed dawn;
a tiny poem-violence
and
a murmur
-muddled moon.
..
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murmur-muddled moon… how excellent isn’t that… I knew you would use the moon, so i had to abstain.
Oh, B. NEVER stop writing about the moon. I love reading them as much as I love writing them.
I love your muddled moon!
This is gorgeous De, I love your ‘quiet sigh -lence’ and your muddled moon :o) xxx
Nice view of the moon as muddled.
This speaks quiet sigh-lence to me. I love a murmur-muddled moon.
Oh, lovely. You make muddle so romantic.
your line breaks create such a gorgeous mix-up of words
Love that “murmur-muddled moon”.. ❤️ Exquisite write, De 😀
I too love the muddled moon. And I must say, I adore the title….when wishing on that last star has come and gone….to have a petaled breeze, a song, and a muddled moon. sigh.
I love this poem and “a murmur
-muddled moon.”
The prompt really set off your muse!
I love this – your line breaks are amazing!
This is beautiful! I especially love your three lines!
Interesting De! The crushed dawn got me thinking…
Dwight
“a tiny poem-violence
and
a murmur
-muddled moon.”
Love these lines, especially!
kaykuala
a tiny poem-violence
and a murmur-muddled moon.
Things unfortunately may just be against us sometimes!
Hank
Delicious imagery. Every line is packed full of surprises.
“a tiny poem-violence” … Holy smokes. That is amazing!
Beautiful:
“won’t you hold for me
a petaled breeze
between your teeth”
And what you did with “murmur(ation)” — of starlings, swarming the moon. I love the idea of the moon being mud(d)-led too.
I love the title, De, and the magical feel to your Quadrille. What a wonderful image: ‘a petaled breeze / between your teeth! And those gorgeous lines:
‘a tiny poem-violence
and
a murmur
-muddled moon’.
🙂
+1 on this. Aside from brilliant word play – it’s sounds great read out loud (in a kitchen, on one’s own). Terrific.
Fun alliteration throughout, De. Nice.
Sublime…love the ‘petalled breeze’
a petaled breeze / between your teeth” and “crushed dawn” are wonderful!
won’t you hold for me
a petaled breeze
between your teeth,- this is my favourite bit and I think if this is what muddled holds then I like muddled.
From petaled breezes to sigh-lence to crushed dawn to murmur muddled moon- yeah.
Oh yes!! I like the way the title flows into the poem, speaking “sigh-lence” and “murmur-muddled moon” knocks it into the universe!