After You Have Called Upon That One Last Wishing Star

..

,
won’t you hold for me
a petaled breeze
between your teeth,
speak some quiet sigh
-lence
into my hungry ear?

will you save
for me a song or two
………(a day, a year)
from this crushed dawn;
a tiny poem-violence
and
a murmur
-muddled moon.

 

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28 Responses to After You Have Called Upon That One Last Wishing Star

  1. murmur-muddled moon… how excellent isn’t that… I knew you would use the moon, so i had to abstain.

  2. annell4 says:

    I love your muddled moon!

  3. This is gorgeous De, I love your ‘quiet sigh -lence’ and your muddled moon :o) xxx

  4. Jo-Anne Teal says:

    An absolute shiny jewel of words, ideas and imagination!

  5. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice view of the moon as muddled.

  6. This speaks quiet sigh-lence to me. I love a murmur-muddled moon.

  7. Oh, lovely. You make muddle so romantic.

  8. your line breaks create such a gorgeous mix-up of words

  9. sanaarizvi says:

    Love that “murmur-muddled moon”.. ❤️ Exquisite write, De 😀

  10. lillian says:

    I too love the muddled moon. And I must say, I adore the title….when wishing on that last star has come and gone….to have a petaled breeze, a song, and a muddled moon. sigh.

  11. merrildsmith says:

    I love this poem and “a murmur
    -muddled moon.”

  12. Kathy Reed says:

    The prompt really set off your muse!

  13. Jo says:

    I love this – your line breaks are amazing!

  14. Jo says:

    This is beautiful! I especially love your three lines!

  15. rothpoetry says:

    Interesting De! The crushed dawn got me thinking…
    Dwight

  16. “a tiny poem-violence
    and
    a murmur
    -muddled moon.”

    Love these lines, especially!

  17. mhmp77 says:

    kaykuala

    a tiny poem-violence
    and a murmur-muddled moon.

    Things unfortunately may just be against us sometimes!

    Hank

  18. Delicious imagery. Every line is packed full of surprises.

  19. Shawna says:

    “a tiny poem-violence” … Holy smokes. That is amazing!

    Beautiful:

    “won’t you hold for me
    a petaled breeze
    between your teeth”

    And what you did with “murmur(ation)” — of starlings, swarming the moon. I love the idea of the moon being mud(d)-led too.

  20. kim881 says:

    I love the title, De, and the magical feel to your Quadrille. What a wonderful image: ‘a petaled breeze / between your teeth! And those gorgeous lines:
    ‘a tiny poem-violence
    and
    a murmur
    -muddled moon’.
    🙂

  21. +1 on this. Aside from brilliant word play – it’s sounds great read out loud (in a kitchen, on one’s own). Terrific.

  22. Misky says:

    Fun alliteration throughout, De. Nice.

  23. Vivian Zems says:

    Sublime…love the ‘petalled breeze’

  24. qbit says:

    a petaled breeze / between your teeth” and “crushed dawn” are wonderful!

  25. won’t you hold for me
    a petaled breeze
    between your teeth,- this is my favourite bit and I think if this is what muddled holds then I like muddled.

  26. From petaled breezes to sigh-lence to crushed dawn to murmur muddled moon- yeah.

  27. Mish says:

    Oh yes!! I like the way the title flows into the poem, speaking “sigh-lence” and “murmur-muddled moon” knocks it into the universe!

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