Hurricane Heart

..

I thought we were
at war
………..before.

The twister-tangled
words, the crimson anger
swirl, the broken
glass.

The hurt you hurled
as you were leaving.

The crash of anger
-lightning, shattered
zen.

And then:
this cloud
(-stirred,shaken)
………..
sky,
spiked with rum
-bling thunder.

 

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21 Responses to Hurricane Heart

  1. qbit says:

    “The twister-tangled / words” – perfect. And then the drunken sky at the end.

  2. Grace says:

    Love the title and sounds and crash of anger. That is a clever word break – rum-bling thunder. Amazing!!!

  3. rothpoetry says:

    Oh what spiked shards we hurl when in the defense and anger mode!

  4. V.J. Knutson says:

    Oh dear – we have all been there – those of us who dare to love so passionately.

  5. gillena cox says:

    Even the weather resonates a love go e awry. Great write

    Much🌻love

  6. The tension in this piece is incredible. Yummy! And I love the “Spiked with rum-bling thunder.” Really good stuff!

  7. kim881 says:

    Stunning alliterative title, De, and a wonderful build-up of language, particularly the rhyming of ‘at war’ and ‘before’, the ‘twister-tangled words’, ‘lightning, shattered zen’ and the wordplay at the end!

  8. robtkistner says:

    It is amazing how very close the energy of love, and the energy of spiteful anger can be. The comparison to two sides of a coin is so true – and it is so easily flipped to the extreme. Bring in love is dangerous work. Not for the feint of heart!

  9. love how the descriptions match the sounds- hurt hurled; crash/anger. A tempestuous outer/inner poem with a rum ending! Brilliant!

  10. sanaarizvi says:

    Such awe-inspiring wordplay in this one, De! ❤️ Those of us who dare to indulge in passion often witness the sky spiked with rumbling thunder.” 🙂

  11. As always, you splash the words around and create amazing pictures and sounds. I love it, especially:

    “zen.

    And then:
    this cloud
    (-stirred,shaken)
    sky,
    spiked with rum
    -bling thunder.”

    Amazing!

  12. jazzytower says:

    Love it, I feel the anger. Very descriptive.

    Pat

  13. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice sound: “shattered
    zen.

    And then:”

  14. Glenn Buttkus says:

    The whole piece drips with passion and sweat. OMG, save us from /shattered zen/. Like Rob says, those f us married for decades vibrate between those slender parameters of anger and love. Big boy pants and big girl panties, please.

  15. Candy says:

    Woa! That’s some storm!

  16. Shawna says:

    I just adore “bling thunder.” 🙂

  17. The weather, and the drinks metaphor (and hurricane needs rum too)… such an intense feeling in this one… and it could fit the Mardi Gras prompt too …

  18. Misky says:

    Brilliant ending with those line breaks. Nice.

  19. merrildsmith says:

    I love the jangly sounds in this–like the tension building up to a storm–and the twister-tangled words, “cloud
    (-stirred,shaken)
    ………..sky,
    spiked with rum” 🙂

  20. I loved the format you used, so tight and tense. Captivating passion!

  21. Love your line breaks, especially,
    “Spiked with rum
    -bling thunder”

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