Tempt us not,
for we are waiting
for the hot hot breath
of dragon summer breeze,
the way the trees can sway
a soul. The balmy blame of sea.
Thread us not
through flotsam fleet
nor pirate plea for treasured
land, the tempered hand of sun on
cooling face. The blind erase and trace
of nothingness that only moon can bring.
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ooooh I have felt that hot hot breath of summer dragon breeze….what a fabulous descriptive phrase this is! Ah and we wait for the moonbeams …
Love the different feel in the two stanzas….
and have always loved the word FLOTSAM!
A wonderful write De, I love the ‘hot hot breath of dragon summer breeze’ 🙂💖 xxx
There’s a lovely flow to this, it drifts along, like something floating on a summer sea.
The beginning of this feels biblical. And it flows so well. Lovely De!
I like the pacing the the rhyme scheme. I think this poem would be awesome read aloud.
Nice description: “The balmy blame of sea.”
That was magically lyrical De – smooth and sultry verse… loved it!
Sailing on the new moon…(K)
I love how the shape echoes the title of your poem, De, the inspired alliteration, internal rhymes, and that ‘dragon summer breeze’! And yes, ‘trees can sway a soul’.
I love the sway of your words. The last line is a great conclusion to the heated cycle.
The rhythm and rhyme is nice and the subject is lovely. I really love the line “Thread us not
through flotsam fleet nor pirate plea for treasured land”. That has a wonderful lyrical sound.