I have pocketed the dragon,
and she says we are for each other
that today’s enough.
We make a meal of madness,
a fist of arrow-alms
a list of things we whisper-whimsy-want:
……..one meandered daisy chain,
……..a dozen startling dawns,
……..a tranquility of swans.
Lil’s hosting over at dVerse’s Quadrille today. Come play!
Excellent word-smithing; your last line is killer, it’s like the title of a novel, A TRANQUILITY OF SWANS. Your POV is out there (perspective, point of view); very creative take on the prompt.
Thanks, Glenn. That phrase came to me first, all on its own, as soon as I read Lil’s great prompt. Thankful for the inspiration!
a list of things we whisper-whimsy-want — what a great line!
A tranquility of swans sounds much better than a bevy of swans. I nominate “tranquility” for the new way to describe a group of swans. Think about it. A gaggle of geese is absolutely correct…they gawk, sqwak, hiss, poop everywhere they waddle walk. They are not graceful and deserve to be called a gaggle when there is a group!
On the other hand, swans have a beauty unto themselves, they have beautiful graceful necks that arc as half of a heart…they glide…they are pristeen on a lake or pond. Of COURSE they should be called a tranquility! 🙂
I could not agree more. I LOVE the names they give groups of birds, but they don’t always get it right. We have quail in our area, and have decided that a group of them should be called a “kerfuffle.” 😉
Excellent descriptor for swans! I have also used the phrase, “a grace of swans” from time to time over the years in my poetry.” Kerfuffle of quail” — spot on De! 🙂
Kerfuffle of quail…..fabulous!
A tranquility of swans…I like that so very much.
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Amazing word play De. Love those items in the meal of madness!
That’s an incredible poem.
Each phrase is its own gem…although I’m partial to meal of madness. (K)
Beautiful poem De! I too want “a dozen startling dawns”, and many more I hope…
“A tranquility of swans.” How absolutely gorgeous!
I really enjoyed the sounds of this piece.
I like your carefree wordplay, De.
Like others, the swans line is brilliant, as is the dozen startling dawns (it suggests to me starlings, stars and darlings) – and of course the question would a dozen be enough? would one? So clever as ever.
I’m so happy you saw those starlings, Peter…and all the murmurations therein.
A tranquility of swans–perfect!
A tranquility of swans – what a thought.
I love all those wonderful things to wish for… and I would love to conspire with my own pocket dragon.
That last line seals this so poetically! Beautiful.
“a fist of arrow-alms” – !!!
“a tranquility of swans” – one of the most beautiful phrases I have ever heard!