she finds herself
in mysterious skin,
in. she is just
accept this new
[brackets] and //bars//.
….(dances, runs, rhymes)
this quiet dis
It’s Quadrille Monday over at dVerse, and Mish has a fun word for us today.
Also shared over at Poetic Asides, because in April we poem.
That separation does feel like a disaster.
It does, indeed. I LOVE that the word literally means “disconnection from the stars.” Makes this word girl too happy.
I feel your dis-onance here. Good use of other-than-letters to get your point across.
You are very welcome.
Great use of shape and punctuation, De! The title is delightfully ambiguous, and I love the play on premise/promise, ‘hemmed (and hawed) and the synonyms for ‘works’. I think we all have mysterious skin, but it’s so mysterious we don’t know it!
Thank you, Kim. Honestly, I feel like I wake up in different skin about every 3 days.
That ending and those words… I really love it (and yes tied to the title)
One that begs to be read with and without the enlightening extras and I feel the disconnect. So beautifully rendered.
Thanks, Mish. And thanks again for the inspiration!
This form looks familiar, and it works great for you. As I read, I saw a toddler, and she was swaying to music, enjoying the adventure of exploring her limbs and rhythms.
Thanks, Glenn. I LOVE this interpretation, and the idea of “exploring her limbs,” like a tree in the breeze.
Nice blog 💖
Thanks so much. 🙂
My pleasure, followed you ☺️
Bravo, to your persona’s pandemic adjusting
Clever word exploration.
As always, lovely poem.
Clever poem – the italicised text added a kind of frantic subtext to the piece – particularly the last “she works / (dances, runs, rhymes)” I imagined her running repeatedly against the bars that restrain her. – So ‘unravel’ becomes ambiguous – what she’s trying to do (break free) – but also becoming a bit unravelled too. A lot here in just 44 words.
what an opening
“she finds herself
in mysterious skin,”
and the ending ❤
…with all the in-between packed with punctuated word play like hesitations
So much said in so few words. I am wowed.
Love the form and creativity here… and the poem of course.