one lone falling



she finds herself
in mysterious skin,
flush with
……(premise)
promise, but
hemmed
………(and hawed)
in. she is just
beginning to
(accent)
accept this new
frame, these
[brackets] and //bars//.

she works
….(dances, runs, rhymes)
to unravel
this quiet dis
-aster, this
separation from

………………stars.

 

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It’s Quadrille Monday over at dVerse, and Mish has a fun word for us today.
Also shared over at Poetic Asides, because in April we poem. 

 

 

 

 

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23 Responses to one lone falling

  1. Frank Hubeny says:

    That separation does feel like a disaster.

  2. msjadeli says:

    I feel your dis-onance here. Good use of other-than-letters to get your point across.

  3. kim881 says:

    Great use of shape and punctuation, De! The title is delightfully ambiguous, and I love the play on premise/promise, ‘hemmed (and hawed) and the synonyms for ‘works’. I think we all have mysterious skin, but it’s so mysterious we don’t know it!

  4. That ending and those words… I really love it (and yes tied to the title)

  5. Mish says:

    One that begs to be read with and without the enlightening extras and I feel the disconnect. So beautifully rendered.

  6. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    This form looks familiar, and it works great for you. As I read, I saw a toddler, and she was swaying to music, enjoying the adventure of exploring her limbs and rhythms.

  7. gillena cox says:

    Bravo, to your persona’s pandemic adjusting
    Happy Monday

    Much😷love

  8. Beverly Crawford says:

    Clever word exploration.

  9. As always, lovely poem.

  10. Clever poem – the italicised text added a kind of frantic subtext to the piece – particularly the last “she works / (dances, runs, rhymes)” I imagined her running repeatedly against the bars that restrain her. – So ‘unravel’ becomes ambiguous – what she’s trying to do (break free) – but also becoming a bit unravelled too. A lot here in just 44 words.

  11. what an opening
    “she finds herself
    in mysterious skin,”

    and the ending ❤
    …with all the in-between packed with punctuated word play like hesitations

  12. Dale says:

    So much said in so few words. I am wowed.

  13. Love the form and creativity here… and the poem of course.

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