this poem is a tightly wound
spring. she’s a
taut wound caught
up in clacked-black things.
she’s got unspoken
broken and unscattered seed,
unpolished corners
and unmet needs.
she’s a wayward kite
on a fragile string.
let’s unwind her now,
and let her sing.
Lill’s given us a fun word for today’s Quadrille. Come play!
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Despite being a “tightly wound / spring,” this poem seems to dance! Well done.
Fun and zany, as usual…
And thanks for letting me know there is a new diVerse Poets prompt out..
love the kite and the unpolished corners. You’re able to say so much with these images. Well done.
I love that your poem is female, De – is it your daughter? It has great rhythm and I love the lines:
‘she’s got unspoken
broken and unscattered seed,
unpolished corners
and unmet needs.’
“An etched sketched scrape in a twisting sky” —- what a great lead-in to your poem…which is a she! 🙂 And such a diverse she indeed. unpolished corners…a wayward kite on a fragile string….I LOVE the idea that you include the reader by saying “let’s unwind her now and let her sing” —
Could be the release of the child/woman as our parenting role shifts to one that is simply supportive from afar as the poem leaves our pen! 🙂
I like the freedom in the poem, the visual of unwinding so she can sing.
It’s not only fun, it’s a bit of a masterclass in poetry writing!
I love / love poems that begin with “This poem” ~~~~ well done!
Oh I love it… she has sprung free in the end.
I absolutely adore this- especially; “she’s got unspoken broken and unscattered seed, unpolished corners and unmet needs.” But oh.. imagine her glory.. when she sets herself free 💝💝
Yes, let her sing. Lovely poem
Love this. That last stanza went straight to my heart. I know a couple people like this.
Pat
Love this. So well written – its fun and clever.
Singing a poem is one of the best ways to unwind 🙂
Let her sing!!! Amazing write De !!!!
Wonderful, De! Singing unwinds.
Love this, especially the middle stanza.
Let her loose.