an etched scratch scrape in a twisting sky

this poem is a tightly wound 
spring. she’s a  
taut wound caught 
up in clacked-black things. 

she’s got unspoken 
broken and unscattered seed, 
unpolished corners 
and unmet needs. 

she’s a wayward kite 
on a fragile string. 
let’s unwind her now, 
and let her sing. 

Lill’s given us a fun word for today’s Quadrille. Come play!

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18 Responses to an etched scratch scrape in a twisting sky

  1. Despite being a “tightly wound / spring,” this poem seems to dance! Well done.

  2. lifelessons says:

    Fun and zany, as usual…

  3. lifelessons says:

    And thanks for letting me know there is a new diVerse Poets prompt out..

  4. K.Hartless says:

    love the kite and the unpolished corners. You’re able to say so much with these images. Well done.

  5. kim881 says:

    I love that your poem is female, De – is it your daughter? It has great rhythm and I love the lines:
    ‘she’s got unspoken
    broken and unscattered seed,
    unpolished corners
    and unmet needs.’

  6. lillian says:

    “An etched sketched scrape in a twisting sky” —- what a great lead-in to your poem…which is a she! 🙂 And such a diverse she indeed. unpolished corners…a wayward kite on a fragile string….I LOVE the idea that you include the reader by saying “let’s unwind her now and let her sing” —
    Could be the release of the child/woman as our parenting role shifts to one that is simply supportive from afar as the poem leaves our pen! 🙂

  7. I like the freedom in the poem, the visual of unwinding so she can sing.

  8. Xan says:

    It’s not only fun, it’s a bit of a masterclass in poetry writing!

  9. Helen Dehner says:

    I love / love poems that begin with “This poem” ~~~~ well done!

  10. Oh I love it… she has sprung free in the end.

  11. sanaarizvi says:

    I absolutely adore this- especially; “she’s got unspoken broken and unscattered seed, unpolished corners and unmet needs.” But oh.. imagine her glory.. when she sets herself free 💝💝

  12. Yes, let her sing. Lovely poem

  13. jazzytower says:

    Love this. That last stanza went straight to my heart. I know a couple people like this.

    Pat

  14. writingwhatnots says:

    Love this. So well written – its fun and clever.

  15. Ingrid says:

    Singing a poem is one of the best ways to unwind 🙂

  16. Grace says:

    Let her sing!!! Amazing write De !!!!

  17. Wonderful, De! Singing unwinds.

  18. Ali Grimshaw says:

    Love this, especially the middle stanza.
    Let her loose.

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