Murder of One 

There’s a lone crow on a power 
                                       (trip) 
line, squawking about something
or other, and we’ve discovered 
there is nothing left to say. 

Somehow, we are both 
here 
               (there, anywhere, nowhere) 
too late
and too soon. 

Our only remaining 
evidence: this chalk outline 
                              moon. 

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It’s Quadrille Monday over at dVerse today, and I’m hosting. Come play!

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39 Responses to Murder of One 

  1. Well it is just too good, this little verse, already before the last two lines, but with those last two. . .what a stunning, stunning finale . . .

  2. lillian says:

    Is it called enjambment? What you do with words? Whatever the name, it is always amazing to me to see the format your poetry takes and your use of words like this. So well done…a chalk outline moon. sigh

  3. Gillena Cox says:

    Nice one!!! Whimsical and intriguing.
    Happy Easter. Thanks for dropping by my blog

    Much💛love

  4. Ron. says:

    Moonchalk. Great closer, DJ. And thanks for hosting this cool prompt.

  5. rothpoetry says:

    We really are like crows on a wire…. sounds like a politician talking a lot of noise and not saying much of anything! That chalky moon will turn us all into shadows!!

  6. A wonderful poem, and a great ending.

  7. Grace says:

    Wow De, you still managed to insert the moon here. Love the chalk outline moon.

  8. msjadeli says:

    When there is a chalk line around the moon, things are looking rather dim. Nice atmospheric piece.

  9. Truedessa says:

    I marveled at how you wove in the chalk outline moon.

  10. You led me beautifully with the lone crow etc and I wondered how ‘chalk’ was going to enter into your poem. You made me wait until the great ending!

  11. Ali Grimshaw says:

    Love this and the visual ending, “Our only remaining
    evidence: this chalk outline
    moon. “

  12. Shawna says:

    I’m so in awe of the title alone, and then you do all the rest.

    My favorite:
    “Somehow, we are both
    here
    (there, anywhere, nowhere)”

    I love that this might be about teenagers doing who-knows-what at night, with no witnesses but the moon. (I know just what you’re talking about! That ring of glow it sometimes has!) And then they have to “kill the moon,” the only witness.

  13. Wonderful write, especially the image at the end, the clever use of the chalk outline and what it represents.

  14. That title is so perfect… one less than the attempted murder of two crows.

  15. Misky says:

    Your final stanza is stunning!

  16. De, you’re one of the best wordsmiths I’ve ever had the pleasure of reading.


    David

  17. Helen says:

    How delightfully you used this (tricky) form!! Stellar write.

  18. pvcann says:

    Yes, nothing left to say, I love the sense of it all passing before, now gone, what is there to squawk about anyway, well that’s what I take away, great read De.

  19. This was the most ingenious use of the prompt word! Such a fantastic write, De.

  20. Loved this from the title on!

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