aubade with a broken smile 

morning breaks 
us open, and we ponder 
dragon-breath clouds and 
all that crimson fire. 

we’ve already held 
these miles between our 
teeth and found them too 
salty, too muddled-
much for day’s embrace. 

the sky’s a quiet place 
to trace our last good 

Linda’s got a great word for us for today’s Quadrille over at dVerse. Come play!

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20 Responses to aubade with a broken smile 

  1. kim881 says:

    I love the title, De, and the whole quadrille, and especially your use of enjambment in the opening lines! And the metaphor ‘we’ve already held these miles between our teeth’!

  2. Ron. says:


  3. Bittersweet goodbyes are the hardest. Wonderful De.

  4. rothpoetry says:

    The dragon breath sky is a wonderful image! Well done.

  5. Ali Grimshaw says:

    Love this. In particular, ‘we’ve already held these miles between our teeth’

  6. coalblack says:

    “Morning breaks us open” What a different and arresting opening!


  7. marialberg says:

    Hi De, Fun to see you here. Your dragon-breath clouds made me happy. With only 44 words, I’m finding many of mine among these great mornings.

  8. Gillena Cox says:

    Luv that end shift.
    Happy you dropped by to read mine


  9. Grace says:

    Beautiful aubade – so poignant with the last goodbyes.

  10. msjadeli says:

    So intense, the parting (breaking open) and their mutually safe space of the sky. Beautiful concept carried out seamlessly.

  11. The title is fantastic and what follows even more so! So much implied in 44 words.

  12. Rob Kistner says:

    “morning breaks us open…” POW! What a strong open. If this were tennis that would be an ace! Strong piece De… 🙂✌🏼❤️

  13. What a gut-wrenching ending!

  14. I can taste those salty miles! This is so evocative, loved it! 💓

  15. I can feel that good-bye, it feels like the parting has been building over time (as it always does)

  16. merrildsmith says:

    Such beauty and sadness in this one, De! Beautiful imagery!

  17. Love the ‘dragon breath sky”!

  18. Leyde Ryan says:

    Oh my goodness…this one blew me away–in a good way!

  19. we’ve already held
    these miles between our
    teeth and found them too

    truly ingenious, De!


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