august and everything after

forgiveness comes in
juts and starts

and so does fear.

questions unanswered,
truths unsaid,
his icy stare.

a ragged hole in the wall;
(not, quite)
(not quite, yet)

the last straw.

just one more
tiny hole
to her heart.

It’s Quadrille Monday over at dVerse, and I’m hosting. Come play!

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26 Responses to august and everything after

  1. Oh.. this is devastating… so often that last straw is that one that makes it into a true end.

  2. msjadeli says:

    De, you and Bjorn were on close wavelengths today. Heart punches are the worst, especially when coming from a self-righteous fist.

  3. Jim says:

    Oh Thank Goodness! I thought “she” was going to get punched. Fun read, Dee.

  4. It can be life shattering…and those tiny punches can break the dam!
    Love how you wrote this, De.

  5. The punch is raw in this, the rhythm and verse has a little mystery in the beginning, but by the end, there’s no missing the pain. Powerful!!

  6. This is a recurring theme at the moment. The nice guy who acts so out of character. He just punched her the once and he’s sorry. So that makes it all right, doesn’t it? We’re supposed to feel sorry for him.

  7. rogblog666 says:

    there are some raw emotions on display here. great poem.

  8. forestbather says:

    The way that ending comes.

  9. Ron. says:

    Gllad it’s pastlife stuff for you, De. Clear, powerful work. And thanks for hosting the cool prompt

  10. Nicely done poem with a “punch”

  11. rothpoetry says:

    Well done! The hole punches to the heart are the hardest to overcome!

  12. Gillena Cox says:

    Bravo. A case of punched to heartbreak. No one likes to be there, but it happens.


  13. felt like that will end it. love the build up, De!

  14. kim881 says:

    I take it this isn’t a recent thing, De? I love the jerkiness of the opening stanza – it sets the tone for the rest of your quadrille. I’m familiar with icy stares and the occasional ragged hole in the wall – and tiny holes and punches to the heart. Now I feel depressed, but in a good way, because your poem has had an effect on me. But I hope the next quadrille is a little more upbeat.

  15. The uncertainty and the premonition and then the pain. Love the structure of this.

  16. Sherry Marr says:

    I can feel the pain. Wonderfully and authentically expressed.

  17. Raivenne says:

    The rhymes here are as sharp and jutting as that finally straw, delivering that pain just as surely to mine own heart, that also once forgave one time too many, as hers.

  18. Ali Grimshaw says:

    Relationships can be so complicated. There is a dance of stepping toward and away. I especially liked your first and last stanzas. Nicely done.

  19. So sad! Amazing how just 44 words can cover the whole scenario. A great write!

  20. Shawna says:

    That title is stunning, as are your brilliant line breaks and rhythm. You are always and ever the queen I bow down to in awe and adoration.

    I know what this is about, but pretending I don’t, I see another possible story in which a young girl perhaps has learning disabilities and is suffering at the hands of a frustrated father or teacher who doesn’t know how best to work with her.

  21. I could feel the lead up, and the ending. Perfect line breaks as usual, De.

  22. Oh wow this is good. Sharp as an arrow into the heart. Made me cry

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