aubade (in the key of d)

Posted on November 4, 2022 by whimsygizmo

(minor)

morning breaks 
her open, flames 
too soon. she’s 

already mourning
darkness, 
stars

and a sinking 
treble-trembled 
moon. 

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3 Responses to aubade (in the key of d)

  1. qbit says:
    November 4, 2022 at 7:31 pm

    In the key of “De” for sure.

    Reply
    • Shawna says:
      November 5, 2022 at 7:32 pm

      Yes, and I love how she set the scene by telling us she was a minor. It makes me imagine she was with an older boy who might have taken and abandoned, making her feel like a minor character in her own story. That makes “stars” take on another meaning too. Perhaps he was 18 and she was 14 and everyone at school was talking about it, even though he wouldn’t talk to her at all. That fragile, that young — that does a lot of damage.

      That’s just what I see.

      Reply
  2. Ali Grimshaw says:
    November 6, 2022 at 1:09 pm

    I just love this, especially the trembling ending.

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