oh, blackbird with a crooked wing 

all broken midnight feathered 
thing, shall you only sigh 
to sky? i crimp your caw 
to heart and i 

long to loan you sting 
of bee and yawn of moon
or paper dragon 
fire, the bold desire to build 
of steam. 

It’s Quadrille Monday over at dverse, and I’m hosting. Come play!

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20 Responses to oh, blackbird with a crooked wing 

  1. Shawna says:

    “self of steam” … love 🙂

    • Shawna says:

      I love that this is about high-school you, crimping a girlfriend’s hair and hoping to help her heal.

      Excellent line break at “sting.”

  2. Self of steam… what a great conclusion…

  3. forestbather says:

    Lovely style, longing, and first line..

  4. kim881 says:

    I love your blackbird with a crooked wing, De! I especially love that you describe it as ‘midnight feathered’, and the thought of loaning it ‘sting of bee and yawn of moon’ to build its ‘self of steam’!

  5. Ron. says:

    Everyone’s raving about “self of steam” but that’s only 3 of this 44-word masterpiece that turns every word and phrase into solid gold, De. I esp admire “i crimp your caw…” and also everything that both preceded and followed it. Mind-blowingly good stuff.

    And THANKS for the cool prompt!

  6. I was swooning from that second stanza, a truly gorgeous quadrille, De! 😍

  7. memadtwo says:

    wonderful images–paper dragon fire, especially (K)

  8. msjadeli says:

    I feel genuine compassion for the broken critter.

  9. Your word play is always superb. Lovely quadrille.

  10. rothpoetry says:

    I like what you did with this one! A poem of empowerment!

  11. You had me at the title! Loved this De ☺️💕

  12. De, always such a pleasure to read your words. I am always filled with anticipation when I visit your blog and you never disappoint. I agree with Rob completely. Mind-blowingly good stuff!!

  13. Misky says:

    You tickle those words as if music. Lovely.

  14. Gillena Cox says:

    Bravo! Nice one


  15. Dale says:

    This is gorgeous, De. Beautiful, all throughout.

  16. dorahak says:

    Love the word-play, agile with the “sting of bee” and “yawn of moon”!

  17. merrildsmith says:

    Gorgeous images and word play here, De! Beautiful.

  18. Incredibly clever ending on this, De!

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