like a river

Posted on February 23, 2016 by whimsygizmo

boat-on-canal(Monet)

 

 …

I am shaken, stirred, blurred
he leads me
into something that can breathe,
beside the still
never
left drowning in my own salt
waters.

 

..
Written for Margo’s Tuesday Tryouts. 

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8 Responses to like a river

  1. Sasha A. Palmer says:
    February 23, 2016 at 11:54 am

    Love the many ways you can read it.

    Reply
  2. Misky says:
    February 23, 2016 at 2:03 pm

    I love that sentence ending with salt … “left drowning in my own salt” – and nice inclusion of the psalm, too.

    Reply
  3. Em says:
    February 23, 2016 at 2:04 pm

    I love this:
    “he leads me
    into something that can breathe”

    Reply
  4. georgeplace2013 says:
    February 24, 2016 at 5:59 am

    Love it De. Beautiful truth

    Reply
  5. Walt Wojtanik says:
    February 24, 2016 at 8:46 am

    I like a river the way you write it.

    Reply
  6. Hannah Gosselin says:
    February 24, 2016 at 5:14 pm

    Oh wow…the two poems in one…together and separate…amazing.

    Reply
  7. C.C. says:
    February 24, 2016 at 7:06 pm

    Beautiful combination of different lines/poems/ways of reading it.

    Reply
  8. margo roby says:
    February 25, 2016 at 12:44 pm

    Oh, yes. I love using text this way, in a poem. Wonderful.

    Reply

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