Scribbling in the Margins of a Day Already Done

{a Golden Shovel poem}

 

The sun has risen once again, and I
am full of spin and the too-tried must
-y scent of syllables with not enough to say.

Today, there’s nothing like the quiet I’m
keeping, held here fast by the dangerous damn
-ing dawn of the torn, the wicked worn, and tired.

 

..

For Mish’s awesome “last lines” prompt at dVerse, a Golden Shovel poem using The Cruel Sea by Nicolas Monsarrat (1951). The book’s last line reads: “I must say I’m damn tired.”  I have not read the book; I bought it for its beautiful old turquoise cover, to eventually smudge up with erasure poems.

 

 

 

 

 

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17 Responses to Scribbling in the Margins of a Day Already Done

  1. “Too tired musty scent of syllables with not enough to say.” This and all of it sounds just like me today. Thank you! I’m not alone!

  2. …dawn of the torn, the wicked worn… love it… and i can understand being tired

  3. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Most of us rise less than rested, already numb and fatigued by these three years of puss-covered spin, lies and cons. Democracy is a ship tilting starboard from the trump torpedo hits. This is a very strong two stanzas.

  4. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice description: “too-tried must
    -y scent of syllables”

  5. Shawna says:

    A turquoise cover sounds so dreamy. The kids have some monogrammed Bibles like that.

  6. Truedessa says:

    too-tried must
    -y scent of syllables with not enough to say

    but, I wish a certain leader would just keep his mouth shut for one day…

    that says a lot…

  7. calmkate says:

    resonates deeply with our current situation

  8. gillena cox says:

    “too-tried must
    -y scent of syllables”

    Caught my fancy

    Much✏love

  9. I know that feeling. Sometimes I need to turn everything off and just be.

  10. kim881 says:

    Beautiful covers and potential for erasure poems are good reasons to buy a book, De. I love the title of your golden shovel poem and the lines:
    ‘…I
    am full of spin and the too-tired must
    -y scent of syllables with not enough to say.’

  11. lillian says:

    Loving the title and most especially these words:
    “I
    am full of spin and the too-tried must
    -y scent of syllables with not enough to say”

    Oh my yes….the 24/7 cycle of news and the untruths and alternate facts spewed forth are exhausting. I have never thought of buying a book to use for erasure poems….Next time I am in a used book shop, I shall do just that. Let my eye be caught by the look of the cover rather than the words. hmmmm and is that what we sometimes do when we hear someone speak? Be drawn in by the cover, rather than analyzing the words???? 🙂

  12. Beverly Crawford says:

    That title speaks to me…and I’m sure you’ll make erasure magic with those musty-scented words!

  13. Mish says:

    Every syllable of this is sweet but I especially love ….”Today, there’s nothing like the quiet I’m
    keeping”.

  14. hank77 says:

    kaykuala

    The 2nd stanza aptly describes many of our poetic minds that keep wandering but yet connecting whenever needed.

    Hank

  15. Jedediah Smith says:

    Making artful words out of quiet feeling – well done!

  16. Oh I love golden shovel poems and you use of hyphens here really works well , adding to the sense of exhaustion inherent in maintaining a scrap of serenity in an almost overwhelming world of dissonance.

  17. Sherry Marr says:

    I love the way you’ve worked the line and word-breaks – makes for a very intriguing poem. I’m damn tired, too. LOL.

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