…
Rise up and call yourself
strange, unchained
from sky and sea and song.
Moniker your soul with thorny
crown, held down by silence.
Stem the sweet, sweet smell
of somethingness;
give
up
up
up
and fill your cup,
revel in the way you
………………….rose.
..
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I love how you used rose in two ways and how well they blended.
This has a very interesting tone, almost sing-song as it says,
“give
up
up
up
and fill your cup.”
There is so much here, in an economy of words. It is absolutely, stunningly beautiful.
“stem the sweet, sweet smell” The references to a rose throughout the piece is wonderful.
Oh, I just can’t choose a favourite line. I would copy the entire poem. Thanks!
Oh that moniker… the thorns and how you went from rise to rose… (it’s all there, what happened inbetween)
So very well done…..stem the sweet smell, and fill your cup! 🙂 Love the movement in your words also! 🙂
How very inspiring to read De ~ Love the use of “rose” in the end.
I like the double meaning of rose, beautifully exploited in your quadrille.
The Rose of Sharon 🙂
Love this! Love how you use rose two ways and how yu name yourself, Wonderful. This poetry form loves you.
Gosh, this is lovely. So many moods and sensations and contrasts…
Your poem brings with it scent. I can’t explain that… maybe I started with rose scent in my head and your poem brought it forward. Be that as it may… lovely!
Gorgeous and inventive! Loved.
“revel in the way you rose”…I just want to say that over and over.
Different meanings arose for me in this exquisite, little, perfect poem, De. Perfect title too!
I rise up and salute you!
Moniker your soul with thorny crown, revel in the way you rose.. beautifully done!!
Makes me want to rise up and salute! I salute you! Lovely.
Uplifting! I especially like “stem” used as a verb. The first stanza is amazing. I can visualize it as a quote, framed on the wall.
Unique and inspiring quadrille…wow!
“Moniker your soul with thorny crown..” ~ wow! This is beautifully done. ❤
“revel in the way you
………………….rose” …. Oh, how I love that!
I love how you were able to use “rose” in two senses here…the rose becomes a wonderful metaphor for overcoming hardships here.
Brilliant, as always!
I’ve risen because God lifted me. That I can revel in!
I like that you chose to use rose as a verb in this.
Your imagination rose up magnificently here
I love the undertones of Shakespeare’s Juliet and the play on words, De. Wonderful!
A poem about overcoming the ending fits perfectly
I read it as a poem of Resurrection.
A powerful call to rise!
Quite clever 🙂