Some Nights Hold Teeth


..
,
when the wind blows
it all loose and mean
around your shoulders
and the iron cloak of
darkness closes in. More
questions than you have
punctuation
for; more clouds than
this ebony scrim deserves.

The stars mock sharp,
as the moon
unzips her smile.

..
It’s Quadrille Monday over at dVerse, and I’m hosting. Come play! 

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27 Responses to Some Nights Hold Teeth

  1. Shawna says:

    I love this:

    “‘More
    questions than you have
    punctuation
    for”

    You have me picturing the moon without teeth. 🙂

  2. oh, lovely. that bit about punctuation is fab.

  3. Jo Aylard says:

    This one reads creepy to me — I shivered when I read it – well done!

  4. kim881 says:

    Another stunning Quadrille! I love the lines:
    ‘…More
    questions than you have
    punctuation
    for…’
    and
    ‘…the moon
    unzips her smile’.

  5. Big ol Cheshire cat of a moon smile me thinks. Marvellous.

  6. Oh, this is a good one! The moon unzipping her teeth gave me the shivers. Bravo at making poetry out of a word that wouldn’t light up for me.

  7. Grace says:

    That ending gives me goose bumps De ~ Thanks for the choice word and hosting Quadrille ~

  8. Misky says:

    How wonderful! “the moon unzips her smile.” I love that!

  9. Shawna says:

    Coming back for another read. I really love the way you worded this line: “The stars mock sharp”

  10. Shawna says:

    Also, I think it says “smocks harp” … Now I’m picturing an angel in a painting smock, decorating Heaven with splashes and blots of color.

    • whimsygizmo says:

      Oooo. I love that meld.
      I was channeling my inner Ann Voskamp with “mock sharp.” Early on when I fell in love with her writing, I realized she never really uses the adverb form. She is Canadian, but I do think it’s just a poet choice on her part. To me, “mock sharp” is so much more powerful of a line than “mock sharply.” I love when words just get down to the grit of it. So I’ve been lopping off “ly” lots of times, ever since.

  11. Jo-Anne Teal says:

    This entire poem has little jewels strewn throughout but what first caught my attention was the wind being mean around shoulders. Such a unique way to phrase that chill in the air that makes one pull their sweater neck tighter and stoop to fend off the cold. Wonderful throughout!

  12. rothpoetry says:

    The moon unzips her smile! Oooh… a very sensual analogy!
    dwight

  13. Waltermarks says:

    I think the moon was behind the entire wind thing. He does that just to get your attention. Those mocking stars too, they’re sneaky. I really liked the imagery, thanks

  14. As with other comments, great imagery. A whole bunch of delicious dissonance in this – the ebony scrim, the stars mock sharp – the repetition of ‘more’ and the semi-colon smack in the middle makes me read that line twice and think of Hamlet’s ‘…more punctuation in heaven and earth…’

  15. Kir Piccini says:

    I love thinking of the moon unzipping a smile. Slowly, perhaps.

  16. lillian says:

    Have always loved the word “scrim.” Your words have me feeling this sharp night! Good one!

  17. qbit says:

    The title is what makes this one. So good. Apologia that I didn’t get mine done this time!

  18. Sabio Lantz says:

    Fantastic contrasts – I read the comments to see if I could get more of the meaning or feel but I couldn’t tell if they felt more than me. Indeed I agreed with their love of phrases and turns, but I couldn’t feel the woven whole– but I am a bit to literal perhaps.

  19. merrildsmith says:

    I love this, De. “More
    questions than you have
    punctuation” and the last few lines about the moon–but really all of it! 🙂

  20. Janice says:

    This is a pleasure to read and creates a feeling that permeates each line…so that the moon unzipping her smile feels very real.

  21. Lacking punctuation for all the questions to me reminds me of a Chinese proverb about one’s lofty ideals exceeding one’s abilities. I think one greedy for answers, seeking to extinguish mystery, would be caught bitten by the night eventually.

  22. Mish says:

    “More questions than you have punctuation for” ….wow, I can see those questions, waiting, longing for their proper question marks. Wonderful imagery, De.

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